Fuck you..
I wont do what you tell me!
(isn't that a song?!)
But I would if you said the right thing.
I'm a fool,
as my virgina lay barren,
un-sated and weary.
Romance novels scattered,
near a bed once ours.
Now just mine,
while you're...
you're...
(I don't want to know)
The kids are with me,
while you pull away.
Goodbye I say,
but damn-it!
weeping...
come back to me!
(The fool begs, please...)
Author notes
Prompt: Spoiled Fruit
A contest entry
- Simple Free Verse Poetry by Dalaney.
900 points, ended October 2, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ah..this is really very much curious tone and the words of momments not disclosed yet shared..very much wonderful poetry..thanks...
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ahhh, the emotion in this write! you did very well with your chosen prompt. thank you so much for entering. love, lane
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Excelelnt poem !!!!! raw and well done
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oh you changed the ending
I thought the one you had earlier was so much better... not as clever but better. for me that is.
I might be mistaken but I think the last three lines were not there earlier... -
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I put it back the way it was. I decided I liked the old way too.
Thank you for your nice comment.
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I read it this morning and it stayed with me. came back for another read. this is really good.
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Excellent
Hit the tones of confusion squarely. It is a delema when one drops the ball. The mind can't determine between want and need. You have done an excellent job of expressing those thoughts and feelings. Great poem. Don
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Oh yes.. I know this conundrum of being angry and hurt, cursing them... but also on some level wanting them back!
Raw and powerful emotion hun!!!
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