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One hot day somewhere in the American Mid-West

I don’t know why I have made

a monument of myself

sitting chin-in-hand upon

an overturned bucket

 

it is too hot a day and I

should move to the shade

but I instead I sit and watch

all the inaction happening

before my eyes

 

the brown grass does not move

but from time-to-time a bug’s flight

will deceive me into blinking

 

I could walk over to where

red and ivory sweep together

ignore the age-freckled chrome

twist a few wires together

and resuscitate her

with a cough and a roar

maybe

 

or press radio buttons and

make a blast of Jan and Dean

startle sleeping redbirds

 

she is missing three tyres

and the fourth is flat

but I shall sit and listen

to the tireless crickets

and she shall sit and look

innocently at me

 

holding the 1960s in

her rusting archaeology

 

 

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For someone who is more comfortable in jeans – a poem about an old Chevrolet Corvette.

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  • Dalaney gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    (i love the a/n...wise guy )

    you did it. you surely did. i'm just beaming here. what i love about this write the most is the fun i think you had writing it. i can feel it. thank you, mairi. Love, Lane


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    Brilliant!

    Hopefully you do well in the contest, this is a stunning masterpiece!! Thanks for sharing a bit o' Americanna's nostalgia!!! Peace, Cyn


  • csmmoms2
    September 26, 2008

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    Really lovely

    "Dead man's curve
    is no place to play
    you must keep away
    I can hear them say
    won't come back from dead man's curve".


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 26, 2008

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    As I sit here and stare at my old dead Volvo wagon, it's just not the same.
    I like the picture painted here, well done.

    Buddy

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      No, I agree - a Volvo is a bit of a brick, isn't it. Poor you.

      Thanks.


      • Pure Thought silver member
        September 26, 2008
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        So much of a brick it is dead, ready for the old Volvo bone yard and only 320,000 some miles. For a 1988 it's having an early burial. LOL


  • Amera gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    If she was a Porsche, she’d be worth fixing.
    Love the imagery!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • malmadre gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Poof! and we are sitting there with you, what a versatile poet you are, great stuff!

  • Cinnarry gold member
    September 26, 2008
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    I'm coming with my tools, let's ride!

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      It'll be a squeeze - the 'vette is a 2-seater - but what the hell, lets' go!


  • Melodies
    September 26, 2008

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    Ah, a poem set on the plains with the scene set before the reader in such fine fashion! Took me right there, fine Poet! I have only ever heard crickets chirp at night, and I bet if there was one in my house it would drive me nuts. Aye, they are nocturnal creatures.

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      I said they were tireless!

      (AND I said I "shall" listen to them! )


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Someone is determined not to be too late this time!!!

    Great stuff, I am there, dreaming

    NB3 etc. etc. etc.


  • zochit2me gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Yah!!!

    I could walk over to where
    red and ivory sweep together
    ignore the age-freckled chrome
    twist a few wires together
    and resuscitate her
    with a cough and a roar

    Let's go for a ride...
    with jeans on of course
    And, and the top down...lol

    ♥Becky♥

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Rustle up four new tyres and a can of gas, Becky, and let's do it!

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