You know, I thought I'd write you a letter
Spilling every feeling I've ever had for you.
Letting my soul spill and bounce around in this empty room
Until it finally came back to haunt me in the end like bad karma.
It's times like this; when I'm alone in your room waiting so patiently
Sitting in silence just studying the moment;
That everything I want to say comes to mind
The most depressing part is you're never here to hear it...
Though I'm not sure I'm strong enough to actually say it to your face.
I could start off by telling you that my favourite moments
Are when you're sitting in front of your computer
Paying no attention to me at all
When I can watch, study, admire your presence
and fall in love with the way the monitor is reflected in your eyes
Or maybe it's the times when you lie in bed with me
My head rested in that perfect spot on your chest and I can hear your heart beat
You play with my hair and kiss the top of my head
As we lose ourselves to the image on the screen;
our favourite B-grade slasher film
At this point I'm usually lying on your side of the bed
with my face buried in your pillow; trying to capture all of your scent
Because I know how much I'll miss it when I'm gone
To tell you everything that floods through me at these times
Would take a million years;
See my thoughts come faster than my mouth can form them
But when you ask what I do in these moments of my own...
You'd never believe the complexity of silence.
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More of a letter to my lover.
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Very true. I love the way the last line links to the title. Moving and poignant. Thumbs up!!
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now. this is what i used to feel. i'd go to his room. and we'd watch a movie. my head right next to his heart. just inhaling the scent of him and the essence of our love. =\ we dated for two years and we broke up =) but this is amazing. makes me remember it all. =] awesome job
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wow. this is sooo good!! i loved the imagery in it.
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This really really good but on line 18 you put "And we loose ourselves..." and i think its supposed to be spelled lose. But this has so much good imagery i can picture everything thats happening. Well done!
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Dude, that's amazing! Your imagery is beautiful, as well as your word choice. When I think of poetry with emotion, this is a perfect example! One thing I didn't like though was that the stanzas weren't all the same length, and I think that would be more pleasing to the eye if they were.
Other than that, I enjoyed reading this! Thanks for sharing. 
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Love it!
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Love it!
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Aww I love it! The imagery is amazing, and your emotions come across clear and strong. Well penned
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beautiful and full of emotion.
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Stunning. The perfect mix of poetic imagery and honesty. I really like it
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wow. that is... so beautiful. and so hoenst, and very true. i can relate tp this one, but youve captured it so brilliantly. i think it picked up strength as it went along; the start sounded a little stilted and casual, but it became very strong, and i suppose that mood change kinda reflects the subject matter.
either way, beautiful write indeed.
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I really love this. It's so beautifully written and so sweet. I love how detailed you are in your writing. It really adds so much to the imagery that you paint so well. Great write doll.
x
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Beautiful!
I love this poem. beautiful! and i am blessed even more today, well penned great poet.
many blessings
Rend
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woah. loved the last line. great write.
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This is sweet and lovely, something to which I can relate, since my boyfriend is a HUGE gamer! I'll never understand his relationship with his computer, but the look in his eyes when he says, "I'm THIS close to levelling" is priceless!
Way to capture that feeling!
Laura, aka Immortal
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My fiance is the same. He is so attached to his computer >.< But I love it as much as I hate it, lol.
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