These walls are talking...make that screaming--
Shouting "you don't belong here"...I don't belong.
Inwardly they creep, restricting my voice...
And my eyes turn black and white...
There's no life here--there never really was...
Just a discolored mess taking up your precious space.
Leave me alone here-- it's nice and cold here--
I don't need your two-fold warmth
to cure my frostbite.
Not this time.
Feed me one more lie; I'm hungry,
So maybe two or three.
Smile at me like my eyes aren't burning.
Pass me by, as you watch all my hurting.
Why should you care?
You're just a wall...
And what rises up has to fall-- [everything falls.]
Everything I had left I wasted on you--
And you lovingly embraced it and ripped it in half.
Now I lie here in two
And high above me is you...
But what rises up has to fall.
These walls may be screaming,
But I sure as hell can't hear them.
Author notes
by Wesley Schwartz
i think many people can relate to this piece, because it deals with emotional abuse from parents. while many people do not deal with it to such an extent, i have reason to believe everyone has been mad at their parents for something said or done. This poem is the voice in your head that refuses to take their shit anymore.
A contest entry
- Teenand Angst by ThedarknessIFeel.
370 points, ended October 20, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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I loved this so much, its like your living inside of me, it made me cry but in such a good way.
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Very intense. Not quite what I was looking for. Maybe I should have said something that relates to me. Tank you for entering.
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WOW. Utterly fantastic, and so powerful. Well done, and thankyou so much for entering this piece.
~*~DramaQueen469~*~ -
Naww
I feel your pain.
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This is the Gold! Congratulations, it's wonderful! ahem, well the subject is rather heavy and so harrowing, but you did a fantastic job bringing this all together. All the imagery is vivid and clear. The skewed rhyme is suprisingly fitful and full of energy. I really enjoyed the one line about curing your own frostbite.. I thought that was bloody clever. Cheers!
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strong emotions expressed with powerful expressions...the smooth flow of words is appreciable
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very nice work i love it keep up the great work you are a pro
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ooo i like this, i like the line "feed me one more lie, i'm hungry"
that's good, nice and juicy
haha great write love
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