Kiss thy lips
Look into these eyes
See my sorrow
Once again
Show me your love
Trust in my heart
Let me keep you
For eternity
Don’t deceit me
Or cheat me
Just let me be
Show your love
Lay here with me
Don’t leave me, ever
Rejoice for our love
Shown here
So kiss thy lips
And look into these eyes
See no sorrow
For your love
Has washed it away
Author notes
BLUE AND SILVER ROCK
I wrote mine about number 5.... love
Written January 23rd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Blow me away by Godslittleangel.
302 points, ended March 22, 2004, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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me, me, me, me, me. selfish art thou? lol.
This is definitely more of your style, free verse. No rhyming, so no issues with forced rhyming.
Again watch the cliche issue.
Still, better.
Good job, keep dreaming in keystrokes.
This is Xanadu signing off for the night. TTYS, and good luck with future writes. -
I like your poem... but if you want me to consider it read my rules please... there are certain things I want you to do. Thank you I will comment again.
Godslittleangel -
oooh beautiful
so beautiful especially the last stanza. very passionate keep on posting & penning.
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