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Torn Asunder (Sonnet #68)

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Me thinks that thou who passeth in the night

More oft than not is hidden in the mist.

Thou filleth up my life with pain and fright –

I’m torn asunder at each evil tryst.

That fear fraught night whose hours hold my fate

Surroundeth with a blackness naught can rend.

What once bloomed love now ferments only hate,

And what was deemed eternal now must end.

And then an eerie glow looms through the haze,

The bodkin that I bear leaps to my hand.

She fixes me with haunting baleful gaze

That burns my flesh and leaves its searing brand.

My quand’ry flees with bodkin’s gleaming blade,

No longer must I live this cru’l charade.

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  • Ellis gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Its bats (to cats)

    This is too much
    for this innocent cat!
    Yes, I had a hunch
    you're as mad as a bat.
    I and my friends are going to
    put a bell on you;
    so all will know just who
    is the most mad poet in this zoo!

    Tiki Cat
    Buy Tiki's Gourmet Cat Food
    "Too Good For Humans"


  • Puked Up Pixie
    September 26, 2008
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    Wow. Damn Paul. This is amazing.


  • suseann
    September 26, 2008

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    Vibrant language seers the readers mind with this authors disparity verse. Sad story told with poetic fervor.Your talents would do the masters proud.