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Infusion

 

Oh what a beautiful image of self destruction

I have entered into so willingly

 

Puncturing my own fruit with society's needles

simply to watch my branches

wither away from the gifts

I have been so indignantly

graced with

 

Force feeding other's intuitions

into my sustenance of life

I stare incessantly,

blind to the fact

I am flushing out of me

my own uniqueness

 

With swelled eyes, parched lips,

and my potential seeping out

from every orifice

I ask...

 

Is this what you meant

for me to be?

Author notes

I think my general idea behind this was better than what I actually came up with... but, then again, I am quite critical of my own work.

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  • Everse
    September 30

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    Damn cuz, that's piercing. I need to make a trip up there to see everyone and catch up with ya. Hope all is well fam.


  • suicidal-revenge
    September 30

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    wow Corrupt this is really good. Still working up your amazing poems with your wonderful talent i see. I havent been on in a while. That picture is quite outstanding, it has alot of meaning and definition to it. I couldnt stop staring at how awesome it is. And then i read your poem. WOW!


  • brooklynngirl
    September 29

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    AMAZING JOB!!!!
    this was so well done, i totally enjoyed this poem. the imagery and word choice is perfect.
    awesome job.


  • afroqban
    September 27

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    wow, u made the take as if it was speaking out. thats great writing there, i really felt her pain. nice job


  • bigperm gold member
    September 26

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    way to own the image. You seem to have found quite a flow with the the inspiration that this image has sparked.imagine though the picture that would be in your head having read this but not seen the photo. one could imagine as odd or as average an interpretation as their personality would allow. nice work

    . Rewarded 6

  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 26

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    Again, I love the use of metaphors here but I also love how you have made the picture feel more personal to yourself. It really helped to bring about the essence of life in a stronger way. Thank you for your entry and best of luck

  • close to home
    September 26

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    Beautiful

    this was great. I loved the way it all flows toughter. It shows great emotion. i love it when a guy can show his feeling for anyone to see. It is so amazing. Absolutely th ebest I've read in a while.
    *DANI*

    . Rewarded 4


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 25
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    Wow. WOW.
    :: speechless ::
    Write on!
    ~*~SP~*~


  • LostLoverPoet
    September 25

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    wow this is simply amazing and inspiring i love it the metaphors and concept good luck in the contest and in your wrting your good


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    September 25

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    true dat....

    quit being so hard on yourself mr or i will smother you with gummy fruity hugs
    i think you did great with this prompt so good luck in the contest!

    Tasha


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    September 25
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    This is an incredible poem. It is very harsh.

    Great job.

    Mike


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    September 25

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    BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!

    whoa!
    that was breath-taking!
    Adding this to my list
    of POEMS that
    Rocked my intestines inside out!
    Congrats...I have not done a
    three BRAVO...in quite a while!

    absolutely sobering write!
    ears/Seattle

    way to unleash!



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