It's morning time,
A faded mirror,
My eyes adjust,
And move within her.
A beating heart,
Breaks through my chest.
The softest skin,
The softest touch.
She lays so peaceful,
A slight exhale,
Her warmth transcends,
My selfish skin.
As each breath falls,
It becomes more clear,
Life is perfect,
When she is here.
Author notes
Hello 
I wrote this about waking up next to my girlfriend and how lucky it makes me feel. A little mushy...
Not my usual style... but it was fun
Username - Trent plus pen.
Peace,
Trent.
A contest entry
- History Books Forgot about Us (And the Bible Didn't Mention Us.) by They Say Shannon.
600 points, ended November 27, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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Very touching.. loved it
db x
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Thank you
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this is lovely, a teeny tiny bit mushy...but it's mega cute
I'm mega tired, so forgive me for the rubbish comment, but finalist
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Thank you
Hahaha it's a little but more than just "a teeny bit mushy" it is approaching "major mushy" territory.
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I could never show my boyfriend my mushier stuff either, he'd prolly have loved it, but my feminist side was just far too strong
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Hahaha, mine would get awkward and embaressed about it.
God, I hate awkwardness. Worst thing ever. -
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I tend to create awkwardness without even trying...
I'm mega special
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Hahaha me too, thats why I'm so scared of it
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awww--
it's okie... I'm clumsy & awkward...
it only gets better...you have it easy really
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hahaha you think you're clumsy! I'm a lanky clutz
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I bent down at work today to pick up a pen, and ended up on the floor and spilling a drink over me.
I'm ridiculously clumsy
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Hahaha sounds very much like something I'd do
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I wasn't impressed, jeans were soaked and I was just there like...hii..I'm going to hide down here behind the till for a litle longer lol
I'm sowie that we've strayed so far from your poem
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ty for entering good luck
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mmmm yes awesome poem here my friend.. well done...
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Thanks
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awh this is adorable, not mushy at all!!
i love it,
you raelly should give this to her, i agree with They Say Shannon, she would love it. hell i would adore the guy who gave me something like this.
and i'm sure she wouldn't vomit
great write,
thanks for entering
and good luck!
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Haha thanks
Nah she would think I'm lame haha, I can't blame her - it's pretty mooshy!
She's an amazing girl though... maybe one day I'll show her.
Peace
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awh i'm sure she would love it
hope things go well~!
haha
Peace out
Boy scout~!
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Awe, I'm glad that you entered, hun.
And this is super cute. (:
Ahaha.
You should definitely give this to her.
I'd love it if my boyfriend gave me something like this.
"A beating heart,
Breaks through my chest.
The softest skin,
The softest touch."
"As each breath escapes,
It becomes more clear,
Life is perfect,
When she is here."
Those two stanzas were great.
They helped show your point perfectly.
I liked the rhyming, it was subtle but nice.
I really have no problems with this.
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Haha Thanks
Thought I should enter one of your contests!
I might give it to her... but she isn't one for mushy things like this. I would probably make her vomitt haha.
She's fantastic
Have fun judging!
Trent
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