Seemingly sitting atop your throne
thinking that you've figured me out.
I have seen your kind before
and I know what you're all about.
So quick to tell me what remains
a good deed or a sin.
Expect me to comply
so you can get beneath my skin.
I will have you know
I choose to live a life for me.
No longer treading water
for my soul has been set free.
I won't let someone make the choice
to place me on the shelf.
I just need to find the strength
and hope within myself.
Author notes
Yeah, I know it's a short one. Someone "recommended" the title, so I figured I'd run with it from there.
It doesn't require someone else to help you find your serenity. Everything you want is for the taking, and though some would like to convince you of otherwise, this simple fact remains so true.
I still have many lessons to learn in life, and this is just an example. I write to not only inspire you, but to inspire myself.
Remember these 5 words. "You're worth so much more."
Share with me your interpretations.
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ME LIKEY!!!!!!!!!!
Girl, you have hit the nail directly on the head with this brilliant penning! I love blunt, in your face kind of poetry, and this fits right into my category! LOVE IT!!!!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWIT
WRITING IT HER OWN WAY
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that is a really good one hun....I't is such an inspirational write for me..I hope to find you again and we can talk about things to get us through ..wow that sounded kinda bad..yeah I went there.lol..
great write,hun.
love you,
Sarah
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Another vision shared with you... Dare to be yourself, and if "they" do not like it.. well their loss I would say. I love the style, not clutter, good meter, consistant rhythm, good flow....
Have I said it all?
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Even though it was short, I loved this! These lines are amazing:
"No longer treading water
for my soul has been set free.
I won't let someone make the choice
to place me on the shelf."
One thing I will suggest is more rhyming - if you rhyme more, it will be more powerful and flowing.
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Nice job and words to live by. Speaking if words "throan should be throne and your in the third line you're." Happy trails.
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Thanks for reading and thanks for the advice. Problem solved.
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it is a hard lesson for most people to come to terms with: others cannot give you signifacnce no matter how much you want them to.
whenever we give that much of ourselves to another person, we open ourselves to be effected negatively; grossly disappointed. My boyfriend has many similar views as you do, and we have had many philosophical debates. Sometimes he seems a bit too objective until the point of being robotic, where I try to find a happy medium. But when it comes down to it, we can only be genuine to ourselves and believe/function how we deem best. As long as we are open and accepting of others in my opinion.
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Hahaha, wow. You know I was smiling as I was reading this comment. When you were describing your boyfriend it reminded me of myself. I tend to always be "way too" objective. Any situation that I'm in becomes brokken down and carefully analyzeed. I suppose it's a good reason as to why I don't watch much TV.
Never rely on anyone to help you find the real you. A lesson that I learned the hard way. I second the solutions of acceptance and individual perceptions. -
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lol, yes. I totally recognized him in your words which is quite amusing to me. I think my bf is your spiritual twin, ha.
Maybe that's why in a way I can relate to your ideals and know where you are steming from. It is sorta creepy, ha.
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I love it.....major kudos....the message is amazing, my interpretation, "It's my life not yours I live it for me not you"...but yeah..>I liked it
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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acceptence has always been there, we just quit listening sometimes, the other voices of the critical drown it out
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You've got a point here....but then again everything said on this one has a point to me...lol...great insight
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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I really couldn't have said it better myself. I like many, became victim to the voices of those that have lesser faith. I finally took the time to realize, that I have the ability to rise up to my own expectations, and to rise above anything "they" thought I could be. Such is the art to esteem, peace, and serenity.
Thanks for reading, I really do love the feedback. It brings a warmth to my heart to know that someone can relate to or comprehend the messages behind my poetry.
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I think this is a very good write. I think many people(including myself) can relate to this. great job!
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