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Jupiter Sinking

things dont feel
as heavy as they should

i used to walk
where gravity pulled against my feet
dragging my thought
down

theres people crowded
their clothes
pillowing out
why cant they understand that theyre
floating?

tires wont wear down,
they spin as if
they know im watching
with smokeless ease

i breathe
and things just drift

away


this hole in the earth

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  • badnovocaine
    September 29, 2008

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    I agree with the first comment, i like poems that leave it up to the reader.
    Anyways loved the part:

    theres people crowded
    their clothes
    pillowing out
    why cant they understand that theyre
    floating?

    When i write i usually like to leave it up to the reader to interpret but the thing is im so blunt when i write that it shows normally. But im not blunt when im not writing (hope thats not confusing.)

    Anyways I LOVED this poem, i like this a lot.


  • righteousme
    September 26, 2008

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    ozone like crazy ... but is it your ozone or our ozone? hmmm ... i like this and the interpretation is left up to the reader which is even better ... great write !!!