When you assassinate my character
and butcher my feelings,
I am left
with only sadness to fill my gut.
Your spiteful reactions
to the world at large
make me weep
for the rest of your days
and the sacrifice of mine
for a third of my life.
You make me think
horrid little thoughts
of bloody incrimination
and I taste copper on my lips
in my own anticipations.
Thinking of the time
I must spend with you
makes me ill and
I am wearied by your accusations.
You have a limited amount of days
to make me suffer
and it is a sick little game
in your mind
to see how close to the edge
you can push me
before I fall
onto scabbed knees
and razored wrists.
I understand your place
and am aware
that you wish for me to be
nothing but miserable.
I have fought valiantly against
allowing you to witness my meltdowns
but I am dangerously close
to losing control
and while I am certain
that you wish me
to brutalize myself into shreds,
I am more likely
to spill your innards
should I get the chance.
Author notes
Some people are not smart enough to leave well enough alone. He wants me to harm myself when I'd really prefer to hurt him.
Option 1D - "I want to hate you half as much as you've made me hate myself"
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Comments
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Brilliant write. So much emotion. The anger is so evident here and so just! i was literally on the edge of my seat reading this. Great job and thank you for entering my contest
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good work on using the prompt. thank you for entering and good luck
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Everything about this poem is put in such a way that I would not want to change a thing. I love how you placed the format, and the few words rhyming here and there did a lot to it.
You have written a very vivid piece filled with emotion. The metaphors you used were absolutely great. This piece was written very definitely for the reader to feel in the guts.
Most pieces of this topic can be very sad. But this one is so very dark. More so than the others, and its why I appreciate it the way you have written it. The content was a very painful, but believe it or not, it shows your strength within. I have so many favorite lines it has taken me forever to point out one, but I chose this one:
"You make me think
horrid little thoughts
of bloody incrimination
and I taste copper on my lips
in my own anticipations."
This stanza has that underlying tone of revenge. And I love it. The last line, however, is a very cruel thing to think of and it makes me very angry towards this person. Amazing piece. Good luck! ♥ -
Wow, very upsetting, but this poem is a good one.
:'(
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