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Vodka Tears

Swish and swirl vodka bottle,
Here we are again.
Everything is falling apart,
So I called on you my friend.

I need your help tonight,
But only a little bit.
Not enough to cloud the world,
Only enough that I forget.

I'm trying to be strong,
But the going has got so rough.
Here's to you and the pain you erase,
When it's all too tough.

Take away the longing,
I hold for just one kiss.
Don't forget the thoughts,
Of the embrace that I so miss.

Lighten but don't douse the flame,
That's burning deep inside.
The one that's causing me such pain,
And the countless tears I cry.

Can you wipe away the heartache,
That makes me feel like I can't breathe?
And memories of us together,
That steadily torture me.

I don't want to see his eyes,
And I don't want to see his smile.
They only tell me he's not here,
I just want to forget for a while.

You're almost empty and it still hurts,
You must be losing your touch.
I can't dry the river in my eyes,
I guess tonight it was just too much.

I'm breaking down losing grip,
But only you can see.
I'm drowining in these vodka tears,
Without the best half of me.

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  • MissyYates
    October 13, 2008
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    Awesome

    I really like the first 4 lines the most but this is very well writen.


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    October 1, 2008

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    Ugh I hate break ups. Can;t stand them, even if i know it is over its just horrible.. i feel your pain and i am very sorry..
    Good luck with everything, and i promise it will get better..
    Ros