Repetition’s got the best of me , with my routine quite the same
I need to find a different purpose, need to take a different aim
For years now I have felt like this, I better change before I rust
Which road to take I do not know, I have to close my eyes and trust
Therein lies the problem, I’ve felt jaded for way too long
I need to dance a different dance, and sing another song
Will the outcome be diverse, can there be a brand new me
Am I taking baby steps, or will it be the enth degree
My changes have all been made, and I smell like a new car
Now I face a perplexing new question, have I gone too far
Author notes
inspiration from drawing-Drawing hands by ~sisterN atdeviantart.com
(enth used to portray huge or many faceted)
A contest entry
- "This statement is a lie." by PatheticKt.
300 points, ended September 30, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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First of all, thanks for placing in your author's notes, the person who made the drawing. I found the picture in google so I felt guilty that I couldn't find any credit for it and all.
Ok, moving on: I actually have a hard time to write about change and its aftereffect so the contemplation of the persona was great especially the last two lines- it was like a cliffhanger, another new question to ask yet again making the reader wonder as well.
I wondered, all right; is changing yourself a good thing or a bad thing? Hmm . . .
Overall, wonderful take you did here, all right!
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five stars!
You did a great job! this really is the human wish for change, and then looking back with our only question, did we go too far?
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Awesome write !
You are very good at these picture inspired writes
This one is no exception. Great job and best of luck in this contest
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Wonderful!
You express such wonderful imagery in every word. It’s as if you can feel the indecisiveness, and the doubts you are experiencing. As well as wanting to celebrate your final decision with you. "My changes have all been made, and I smell like a new car"
Extremely well written
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I like your insight and your way with words. I loved the last lines of this poem:
My changes have all been made, and I smell like a new car
Now I face a perplexing new question, have I gone too far
Great job.
Mike
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