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before the wind came

As I'm kicking dandelion heads,
grasshopper wings are flicked up
like little seeds also I can still separate
genera to,

numerously a batch
on the stem of a jump,
self-transplanting themselves
every time the shadows of my shoe
elongate











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  • we-are-already-dead
    September 25, 2008
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    But why would you do that to dandelions *crys*


    • bird at rose
      September 25, 2008
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      I see the sadness of cutting out these 'weeds' ...

      But, I was just gently knocking the fluffy ball of seeds off, and sooner or later the breeze would do it anyway

      I'm didn't mean for your construing to tear you up,
      Daisy


  • Melodies
    September 25, 2008

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    A lovely and most scientific poem you have written, Daisy. Affords much to think about and enjoy.


    • bird at rose
      September 25, 2008
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      That's more specific to this situation than just saying this is my best!

      Thank you, the phrase "most scientific poem" really does express the way I got inspired, even though you couldn't watch me. Wait a minute, often I walk around in circles looking bored, trying to boost a concept, soon building a piece! [that happened this time]

      I don't know why I'm having so much fun right now, maybe it's because I just ate kefir,
      Daisy