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Quest, part two




The clattering sounds of early morning street activity
snapped Rayne to the reality of his situation. In the dim
light he scanned the open pages of the ledger. Doc was
spot on as he targeted 1876, the original Roxieland plant.

Doc's revelation that there was no way back had so
stunned him that the practicality of his situation
was only gradually being acknowledged by his
time-traveled brain. Using the well disguised pocket
flashlight he had packed in his bag, he hand-copied to
his small notebook the Roxie formula, so he could replace
it in the safe. He did the same for some employee records,
to help him fill in the documents he and Doc had crafted
for him.

Since the consequences of changing history had been
well-implanted in his brain by his mentor, Rayne knew
that replacing the formula was essential. He gathered up
the Roxie empties and the caps he had left scattered,
carefully closed the safe, packed a few bottles of Roxie
in his canvas bag, and eased himself back out the rear
window he had entered.

It mattered not to him at that moment whether Doc
might join him someday or invent a way to return,
for he had to fit in right then, in his new present.
It mattered how he introduced himself, where he
would work, where he would live, of necessity,
close to his landing location.

"Hey, get out of the way," a driver yelled at him
from his perch atop the wagon. "Sorry," Rayne
hollered back as he dodged the horses.



"Nothing like calling attention to myself," muttered
Rayne. He remembered the mock situations he and
Doc had worked out, depending on his destination.
It was always identity papers, exchanging currency,
a place to live. Too early for the financial district,
didn't want to risk attention by attempting to pay
with one of the gold coins Doc had packed in his
bag, so a restaurant was out of the question.

He sat down on a bench outside the hardware store
that had been his arrival point.

"Time for a Roxie," he smiled to himself.
"What's this?"He had found Doc's travel
formula bars, rich with nuts and seeds,
and settled back to watch the increasing
traffic, eating his first meal in 1876.



He realized how lucky he was that the business
district was filled with a variety of buildings,
all coming alive as early morning employees
entered; so much activity, so many people that
he did not stand out.

The clothing he had packed would suit a day laborer,
perhaps a job at Roxie, or in the busy garment industry.
His skills acquired beyond his BA degree in history and
English literature included all those an inventor might
want, construction, as for doc's new lab addition,
chemistry and mechanics.

"Man," he almost laughed out loud, "Could I advance
the transportation industry...fast! The image of his yellow
‘55 Chevy flashed thru his mind. And, for the first time
in this adventure, he thought about leaving the picture
on the front seat, her picture that still caused an ache
in his heart.

Then he thought of his favorite Levi's he had insisted
on bringing. Doc warned him, "Son, old Levi was only
producing on the West coast. How are you going to
explain them?"

Rayne imagined opening his own business, manufacturing
his East coast version. But first he had to concoct
a believable story about the coins, his inheritance
from his great grandfather, perhaps, then open
an account, make a deposit, and come out with
usable currency.

Finally relaxing a bit, thinking he had a plan, Rayne
stretched his legs out in front of him. A flurry of skirts,
grocery sacks, arms and legs crashed his reverie.


"You oaf," she screamed, as Rayne tried to catch
the falling disaster!

"Oh, I am so sorry, but you walked right over me,"
he said apologetically, attempting to keep her from
hitting the walkway, apples, oranges, potatoes,
green topped carrots and butcher wrapped packages
flying in every direction!

"Look what you've done," she exclaimed, finally
up righting herself and looking him in the face.
Rayne looked down at her, as he attempted to
hold on to the sacks not yet emptied.

"I, um, you, I, um, well," he stammered, red-faced
and unbelieving.




"Well, haven't you ever seen a woman in distress
before?" she said, not able to control the smile
forming on her lips.

Rayne opened his mouth and tried to form words,
"Yes, yes, yes, I have seen you before." He moved
automatically, picking up the loose produce.

"Where you come from, do you go around tripping
women," she smiled, even more broadly. And what
do you mean, you have seen me? I don't remember
you!"

Rayne's heart pounded so loudly he was sure she
could hear it. He knew he had to find out more
about her. He couldn't let HER walk away.

"Let me help you," he said trying to regain his
composure."I'll take these heavier bags. You
lead the way," he said cagily. He had to know
where she lived. Dare he ask her name?
Thoughts raced in his head.


Several blocks off the main business district,
they arrived at a large white house with an
inviting front porch. In the window, a sign stated,
"Room and Board, Gents Only."

The door was opened by a woman with a big smile
on her face, graying hair piled on top her head,
a crisp white apron tied on over her dress.
"M'darlin' daughter, have you brought
us a new boarder?" she queried. "Are you
from around here, young man?"

Rayne hesitated, "Well, yes, you could say that
I'm from around here. I'm really a traveling man.
But I do need a place to stay." Synchronicity,
he thought, the gods of time travelers looking out
for him. It all seemed so real. But was it all
really happening? He certainly wasn't dreaming.

The darlin' daughter gestured for Rayne to mount
the porch stairs.

Inside the house, a voice boomed, "Well, saints
and begorah, woman, invite him in." Coming to
the door, a man with a thick thatch of white hair,
the image of Doc.

Rayne felt faint. Time travel? Or perhaps,
even more disconcerting...
AN ALTERNATE UNIVERSE!




To be continued...






Author notes

"Holy Gentian Root" precedes this,
as does "Quest."

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  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    February 25

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    Time travel, perhaps a little romance, and of course the mysterious roxie.......I like how you are tying in all of the variables of bringing in future items and the danger that it can cause with changing the future and oh the temptation to do so if there is monetary gain! On to the next! Very well written.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 25
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      Yes, that ominous thought---changing the future
      by altering the past. A huge responsibility.


  • waydownuponjoy
    November 19, 2008

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    the 2nd test!

    Your time travel tale, that you titled Quest
    Is written quite well - and meets the test.
    It flows right along with intrigue and zest
    So I’ll have to read on, to see what comes next!
    You done a fine job, so far, with the plot
    There’s Roxie and Rayne and surely the Doc
    Played a major role or your story would not
    Have gone anywhere except ‘round the block!
    Now it’s going right round in a town that’s old
    Cleverly written and cleverly told …
    The drawings increase the story two-fold
    I’ll be reading it all as the days unfold!

    Congrats on the inspiration! jy

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      November 19, 2008
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      Thank you, Joy, for the interest
      and the clever poetic response!

      The other readers just had one
      at a time to contemplate as it
      took a while to set up each one.

      Hope you enjoy the adventure!

      M-C


  • Yemassee gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    For future readers, part three can be found here:
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4646333

  • camelia
    September 28, 2008

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    This has been fun -- wheeeeeeeeeee --
    Came back to see if there was more yet.
    Hurry and finish painting!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 29, 2008
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      Camelia, thank you for your enthusiasm.
      Ideas are flitting about while I brush
      color on clay!

      Looking forward to seeing words on your page, too!

      M-C


  • angelica silver member
    September 26, 2008

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    Geez M-C I'm really enjoying your story and will be looking forward to coming episodes.
    Looks like Rayne knows this blond headed good looker from the future, I guess we'll just have to wait and see.
    Love Joan

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 27, 2008
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      Hi, Joan! Happy to see you following the story.

      The problem with improv, and printing sections before
      the story is completed, is that I can't go back
      and change things, not fair to the reader, if I did!

      Lots of ideas lurking, but painting is waiting, orders
      to fill, so the ideas must lurk for a bit!!

      Thank you for following our hero.

      M-C


  • hugh wyles silver member
    September 26, 2008

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    Dear M-C.

    AWWWWW! I don't comment on contest entries but they can't stop me from reading them. Do I smell 19th century romance in the air? I'll be hanging around so's not to miss the next thrilling episode.
    A, L & H. XXX M-A.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 27, 2008
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      Well, Hugh, since it is your "credit"
      or to your "fault" (see I can both credit
      and blame you) that I ever entered a contest
      at all, you can see it as your responsibility
      to follow up on all future entries!

      Nice of you to stop by.

      M-C


  • Summer52
    September 26, 2008

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    Am just teasing, Mumsy... I know they both love me.
    They show it in many ways... like tolerating my being here in the computer almost the whole day...then they will ask me what I like to eat or whether am hungry or not, yet.

    Oh...need to go really, Mumsy!!! It's late dinner for them... Bye! See yah again.

    Hugs


    Summer51


  • Summer52
    September 26, 2008
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    Uh? Hanging, eh...?
    Am just starting to enjoy, Mumsy!!!!


    What happened????


    Summer51

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Tryimg to stay within Yem's word limit!
      Good idea, or each part would get too long.

      Installments will continue when I finish
      some orders! Lots of stuff to paint!!

      • Summer52
        September 26, 2008
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        Okay...will be waiting for the next chapter....

        Bye for now Mumsy...Will cook dinner for my kids!

        They're coming!!!!


        Summer51


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          September 26, 2008
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          Regarding the comment you made
          on the poem you wrote for your sons,
          see, no outsider you. Always have
          time for you, their Mom!!!


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    September 25, 2008

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    And the plot thickens...good sequel...can't wait for the next one

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Oh, thank you for the visit.
      Ah, yes, I too wonder what
      adventures face our hero,
      with many alternatives
      swirling in my brain!

      M-C


  • moon2u
    September 25, 2008

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    aha keep us hanging...
    hanging for the sequel to the sequel
    you naughty girl
    You are very good at stories Aesthete
    when do we get the next chapter?

    hugs Moony

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Alas, alas!

      ASAP work for me to do!
      Tons! I will dispatch it as quickly
      as I can...and get back to 1876!

      Thank you, dear Moony!

      Sending back hugs,
      M-C


  • arafura gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    You have a delightful imagination my friend! I love your work.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Why, thank you, arafura.

      Yes, the imagination
      gets the upper hand!

      And your work intrigues
      and spins the mind!

      M-C


  • GoodCarMa
    September 25, 2008
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    woo-hoo!

    The plot thickens!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Yes, tempting me with
      so many paths, literally
      to follow!

      M-C

  • Yemassee gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    Rayne's a slow worker...but as thick as a cabbage just like the fellow he's modeled after. He meets a beautiful lady and it takes the old doc to make him light headed...that boy just ain't right!

    Yem is good at bumping into women, and when he does he seems to inspire them to ridicule...just a story I once wrote, some silly thing about sun and snow, and stuff.

    The question is...do I want Rayne to return to modern day? Does Rayne want to...if he does, isn't that going to make Doc's daughter too old for him...and what if she hates Moxie?...such dilemmas!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 26, 2008

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      Methinks Rayne is far more clever
      than you acknowledge.

      And his heart was pounding
      right out of his chest
      upon seeing the at-the-moment
      nameless cause of the heart pounding.
      Better red-blooded reaction
      than feeling faint!

      I had poked around many times
      in the archives, but don't think
      I had found that one. Most likely
      hidden in a cave in Nom's dungeon?

      Plenty of time to speculate
      about what could happen next.
      Fax machine spewing orders,
      last minute ghosts and pumpkins,
      and local sports themed pieces
      lie here waiting for my brush to turn
      whimsical. So part three lurks in the mind,
      while I try to keep it under the surface
      while I paint and paint. Just hate it when
      the ideas want to come to life, and I
      have other committments! Darn!

      Speculations accepted!

      I dropped in some clues that could surface
      in further development---Irish immigrants,
      great grandfather. Or not. And better than
      anti-aging, anti-oxicant skin cream, time
      travel could stop someone from aging.


      • Yemassee gold member
        September 26, 2008
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        Who need anti-aging cream...he has Moxie! The Do-all, Cure-all!

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          September 26, 2008
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          My thought was that the time travel
          would keep her present age, and that
          along with the Moxie----hmmmmm...new
          industry. Step right into the time
          machine, ladies...and gents! And have
          a Moxie!


  • gaze
    September 25, 2008

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    The boarding room said, "Gents only." That leaves Rayne out!

    It seems the only way fictional Yem can meet women is my bumping into them...Yem wrote a story a couple years ago about where he turned a corner and bumped into a woman.

    An alternate universe, that sounds about right for Yem.

    This was a fun story M-C

    That lady up there looks very nice! I enjoyed all of it!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Hi, Mariza!

      An alternate universe---well, I thought
      I'd better keep my options open. It seems
      I have a tendency to want the story to continue,
      to get so involved with the characters and the story,
      that the 500, even 700 words is not enough to bring
      me to say farwell to the cast and end the plot!

      Re the sign, of course Rayne is a perfect gent. Look
      how helpful he was to the damsel in distress!

      Thank you!

      M-C


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    WELL A BOOK PERHAPS
    YOU KEPT MY ATTENTION,
    THROUGH OUT CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE
    WOW CREATIVE IN SO MANY WAYS.
    AWESOME SO AWESOME
    GOD BLESS MY FRIEND...

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 25, 2008
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      Hi, Pisces!

      I am up way too late into the day,
      but I wanted to finish it!
      At least for the day...

      The story wants to just keep in going.!!

      So nice of you to stop in and read!!

      M-C

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