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It's Not Me You Want


I have a great sense of humor, full of quips;
But you choose to focus on the sway of my hips.
I yearn for an intelligent conversation, just us two;
Instead you only want me to talk dirty to you.
I give you my all, and give you my best;
It never seems good enough if it isn't constant sex.
I wish you could see the beauty I have inside,
Not just buried treasure hidden between my thighs.

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This is about someone being in love with the idea of me and what I am able to do for them, and not loving me for who I am....Hope you like it!

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  • Shannon62875
    October 5, 2008

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    WOW!!

    I really, really loved this write!!!! I know exactly how that feels... Sometimes i think thats why my boyfriend wont leave me because he knows what im offerng and knows most girls wont just give it up... WE been dating for 3 years and its like the relationship is now based on sex?!?!?
    I REALLY loved this write... you did an awesome job! KEep up the great work and good luck in my contest!
    shannon*Leah


  • fake-or-real-smile
    October 4, 2008

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    oooooo i like this

    i love the way it's written and it flows so well.

    Well done.

    x.x.x


  • tombruize
    September 30, 2008

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    Very nice write

    Sometimes we reach to eagerly for instant gratification... and never realize that true passion is not the euphoria reached through orgasm.


  • Myjoy gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Very good words, beauty fades all that is left is the heart. The beauty there is seen forever within the eyes even when the skin wrinkles. Well said, truth, and blessings.


  • afroqban
    September 25, 2008

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    ahh, i like the spice in that. kinda put a lil color in black and white (To me anyway). I enjoyed it much. Much love and respect


  • pinkink
    September 25, 2008
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    "I have a great sense of humor, full of quips;"
    Keep shining!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    I think that is a kind of love that you do not need love is to be more then this thanks for sharing best wishes always


  • moluv10
    September 25, 2008

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    Very real and straight forward piece. I love how you express yourself here. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Asylaarix
    September 25, 2008

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    Baby I loved this!
    It was awesome
    powerful
    full of emotion
    and you just got to show 'em what you're made of
    Don't let them assholes get you down
    You are beautiful
    and you deserve the best!!
    Go find it!

    Love
    TT


  • Canadamomma
    September 25, 2008
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    powerful, i like it a lot
    nice take on the prompt


  • carl dunford
    September 25, 2008
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    Straight to the point girl,
    nice poem, good luck ,Carl x


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    deep..

    very well thought out, and nice flow and rhyme. A strong write my friend. lots of luck in the contest to you.

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