The harmony now plays dischordant notes
Where once melody of sighs kissed our hearts
But our skies have darkened with souls remote
As branches crack and bleed, essence departs.
There was a time when we danced with passion
With fiery souls, steps in perfect tune
No recognition, dance out of fashion
Only ashes remain of lover's swoon.
So here's to us playing this dying song
For time and place no longer synchronise
But neither you nor I were in the wrong
And what once was strong are now broken ties.
For what we shared let us have one more dance
A last reminder of a fine romance.
Author notes
Picture Credit-Requiem aeternam by Iardicil.
AND Title Prompt #3 'Once Last Dance'
Sonnet
A Sonnet is a poem consisting of 14 lines (iambic pentameter) with a particular rhyming scheme:
Examples of a rhyming scheme:
#1) abab cdcd efef gg
#2) abba cddc effe gg
#3) abba abba cdcd cd
A Shakespearean (English) sonnet has three quatrains and a couplet, and rhymes abab cdcd efef gg.
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A contest entry
- Come one and all….. Take your choice by Wandering Woodchuck.
700 points, ended October 2, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Gorgeous and well written.
Well thought out, meaningful and absolutely beautiful. It inspires me personally, in the sense, that I might actually try my hand at an English styled sonnet form again. (I've been teetering back and forth on it.)Good luck in the next round.
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This beautiful Sonnet has brought me to tears, as it has vividly reminded me of how lonely I really have been of late. Thank you for reminding me that I'm part of the human race. Lamenting lost love is better than imagining it. Your Gold Trophy was well d
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Thank you for your entry
This is something different than what I am used to seeing from you. A tenderness but passion and sorrow as well. Though maybe it is just the prompts that I have always set. I enjoyed this in any sense.
Really well done with the format of the sonnet. The syllable count was right on. Good flow and the rhyme scheme was well developed.
I encouage you to keep writing to read and comment.
You have been chosen to proceed to the next round. Once the next round contest is up you will receive a link to that contest.
God Bless
Tammy -
this is like a painting. its so beautiful and really is a work of art
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Congratulations twice
for the gold and the January member of the month! I enjoyed reading your wonderful sonnet. You are talented, and I look forward to see more of your work.
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and applause.
Gaylene
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Very, very vivid and wonderfully expressed!
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comments and applause on my poem.
Gaylene
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beautiful in every way...congrats on the trophy
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Wonderful job on this piece!!!! BRAVO!!!!!!!!
♥ Kathraina
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Love the Sonnet and you did a beautiful job with this one. Really enjoyed the read and congrats on the 'Hekate' interview.
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I love this sonnet. It's beautiful!! Very well deserving of the gold
Congrats on being member of the month and having this poem spotlighted
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Excellent
Such a masterful use of the sonnet form. And so well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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wow.. another marvelous piece here... so beautiful and I enjoyed the rhyme schemes used... indeed this poem almost made me cry... well done!
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Great sonnet! Enjoyed reading entire sonnet but especially like the way the last two lines made you think of the entire poem! Good luck in the contest!
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GOOD!
Great piece! Good luck on the contest!
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This is a very sad little poem of the rememberence of love lost. The rhyme and flow are well done. They only flaw was a minor typo in the third line of the second stanza. If you care to repair it, I will read again when I judge the poem.
Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
Mike
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