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the poisonous cloud

the poisonous cloud
evacuated the room
my brother did it



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  • Joseph Hollis
    November 16, 2008

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    This was a very fun read. I think we've all played the blame-game when it comes to emitting deadly gases.


  • artis
    October 20, 2008
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    lol...how often this occurs without warning,

    only one's nose giving the alert to a sulphorous death by breathing lest one exit the room. one of the strange and funny quirks of man, God's practical joke on all of us, practical because if we didn't we would all blow up, and a joke because who can ever stop laughing when one is let loose....LMAO~~~Artis


  • Mari Goes gold member
    September 27, 2008

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    Oh may, a second windy haiku in a row!
    Laughing out loud here!
    That cloud would make the pretty girl quit dancing

    Funny stuff, smell deadly I suppose, but funny, like laughing gas


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    September 26, 2008
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    We always blamed the dog...


  • Yemassee gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Oh sure he did! Likely story...I can see it in your face, you're guilty!

    I just looked at the other comments, we're all saying the same thing, lol.

    I bet we've all done it though, tried to blame someone or thing for our own flatulence...my favorite is to blame the dog.

    Thanks for entering the contest.


  • Summer52
    September 26, 2008

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    Oh...

    This is funny...

    Goodluck!


    Summer51


  • HaleyMary
    September 25, 2008

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    Cool, Sis. Nice to see you write a haiku. I'm used to reading sonnets by you. This was very humorous and reminded me of experiments in science class, except experiments gone awry. Best of luck in the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    Oh of course.. it was your brother... hehe

    Very cool!!


  • NotAMolly
    September 25, 2008
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    sure... your brother did it, right...


  • albymyheart gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    Lol. Very funny. Best of luck in the contest...alby


  • Tirrell
    September 25, 2008

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    roflmao....is this in reply to michael's fine humorous haiku? look out for the thing that crept.


  • Age of Rain
    September 25, 2008

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    LOL! This took me a second, because it started on such a serious note. I love where you took it in the end. Nicely done!


  • Kappa Pyua
    September 25, 2008
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    Rofl, this is funny. Someone had to do it right? Great pivoting haiku. Thanks for sharing. UNT


  • Rovingone gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    Now that's a haiku! I get tired of the lofty poetic nonsense, that one had a real message for us pedestrian types.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    What Jeff said!



    (PS, it's definitely a senryu )


  • StarEyes
    September 25, 2008

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    Sis,

    I remember those days And it seems that it wasn't that long ago, I heard those words from one or all of my boys... Now it is getting to where I will be hearing them again from my grandsons Wow! Where does time go? You did a great job on this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    You nut!!!

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