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The Jagged Edge At 1:01 AM (Explicit Language)

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I, chartreuse and alone sit
in this sour unholy pit
glued to an ash sprinkled keyboard
pissed off and  righteously bored
chain sucking cigarettes
xanex, tea and chocolates

piles of books stacked askew
dusty screen says "Screw you."
scratchy eyed and dishevelled
burnt out and bedevilled
life has become stagnant
a trifling detail irrelevant

oldies plugged into my ear
carpel tunnel of the rear
home is a cluttered nest
these days the worst is my best
bilious hours wasted here
rancid bell-jar atmosphere


two men shit stain my brain
one familiar, libido slain
one young, dumb, full of cum
fluid words, endearing bum
assures me I'm his favorite
happy hard-core holy horseshit

one too busy to romancify
thankyouma'amgoodby
three ring circus energy
why am I finger fucking me?
one leaves a kiss and fond squeeze
then starts to snore, ye gods please!


women are best when left
bereft of erotic theft
by those erratic scoundrels
who use their pricks for morals
sex-pert here, so sage advice is
girls, use mechanical devices

 

 

Author notes

Pic Credit: Eye By Final Touch
Nothing was wrong with him except that he was "He."

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Comments

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  • Emerald Dog
    November 2

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    Your words brought pain and pleasure in unequal measure. I felt the lash of tongue within a sexual dark - and was intrigued. I shall read more.

    . Rewarded 4


    • nichtmich silver member
      November 3
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      Glad you were intrigued....and a little disturbed. Sometimes, it's just the way it is.

  • ApatheticDeviant
    October 18

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    nice nice nice...i love the imagery of this poem...it just jumped off the page at me but i must say that it was a little disturbing even for me but i loved it nonetheless...thanks for entering.

    . Rewarded 4

  • Indeed it is the sketch which makes the reader curious for the immageries and the impact you created by the intriguing notions of the life yet you are very powerful in your impressions..thanks for sharing it..well done...

  • jazzcat gold member
    October 16

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    Whew! This was a solid piece of writing. The ending left me feeling sad and concerned that my wife might read this... You really use some strong images and ideas to get your point across. I think I like the 2nd stanza best, but it's a tough call because each one is a resounding smack in the face that makes the reader pay attention.

    . Rewarded 6


    • nichtmich silver member
      October 19
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      Thank you for your comments and I take it as a compliment that you don't want your wife to see it, lol. Life gets crazy sometimes

  • Eclecta
    October 10

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    Congratulations on the silver. I really loved this poem. It's really full of imagery galore. Best of luck in the other contest.

  • Cinnarry gold member
    October 10
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    Beautiful


  • Lady Disdain
    October 9
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    very well written! thanks for entering!

  • PoesyPeruser
    September 30
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    So descriptive in the atmosphere/surroundings. I can picture it exactly. Cute ending!
    Poesy


    • nichtmich silver member
      September 30
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      Thank you! Some lives are like that, lolol. Lucky me

  • RowanMoon
    September 25

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    lol .."One leaves a kiss and fond squeeze. Then starts to snore yea gods please" ..I know how you feel!


    • nichtmich silver member
      September 25
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      I'm sorry to hear that.....but thanks for the applause
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