WORDS MEANT FOR HURTING PEOPLE,
LIKE THE POISON TO A SNAKES BITE,
LIKE A GAME OF TAG,
TRYING TO FIGURE OUT WHOS IT,
SEEMS LIKE YOU HAVE A LOT OF TIME TO THINK,
CONSIDERING YOUR STORIES WERE SO FICTIONAL,
TRYING TO BRING ME DOWN ISNT GOING TO WORK,
REGARDLESS OF HOW BAD YOU TALK ABOUT ME,
CLAIM TO BE A FRIEND BUT ALL YOU WERE REALLY WAS A FACE,
THATS WHY I KEEP MY DISTANCE,
I HAVE FEW FRIENDS BUT MANY ENEMIES AND AQUAINTANCES,
WHICH SIDE YOU WANT TO BE IN?
Do you think i should write more?
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I understand!
I have a poem similar to this. Words do cut deep!
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i know where u r coming from with this one cuz i hate gossip as much as the next person. too bad i dont know the diffeence between who are tru friends and who should be aquaintances
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Gossip is certainly something that I cannot stand, and I try not to participate.
My sister-in-law is a terrible gossip (gossiper? I should look up which is the correct word
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who cares if its in caplock or not poetic...ALL words come from the soul and that theres poetry in its purest form...so dont u mind what OFFICER CHELSEA bitched about
shes off using her cuffs on unsuspecting felons who write bad checks in capital letters lol
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Constructive criticism? Here goes.
Don't write in caps lock. Not necessary.
There shouldn't be a comma at the end of every sentence.
This doesn't feel like a poem to me. It feels like I'm reading words. Try add/taking out filler words to get it to flow. Shorten/lengthen sentences. It's all about balance. This feels like one big run on. Maybe breaks, punctuation. Read it out loud to yourself- does it have a beat? Or is it like reading a paragraph? When you read it out loud and it comes out smooth, then you're good.
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