http://lunebleu.deviantart.com/art/Aquarius-69789286
Born of the Aquarius
Befriended by all
Beautiful creature traveling alone....
trapped in the water, tied down by all your fears
stuck there for eternity to let your mind roam
Born of the Aquarius
smart, talented
hidden secrets, a hushed voice
bearer of truth, but silenced by all
Let the water drown you.. as it eats you on in the inside...
and let the truth die with you
Aquarius child....
alone, forever ...
Author notes
uuumm i wrote this for my friends contest ... i hope you like it
my name is vampirebrat and i am an aquarius child
A contest entry
- Zodiac Contest by Re-invention.
700 points, ended November 8, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
do you like it?
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me too...i really liked this! awesome
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Very nice. I, too, am an aquarius child born, Feb. 9th. This is well written and I can see why it earned a trophy. Truely stunning work.
Great write,
Silvos.
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i thought i would return the favor for reading my poem, i myself was born a Virgo, but i never really had an interest in zodiac, but i do like what you did here, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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this is nicely penned! dark and personal I see... the way you describe the negative side is awesome and I am glad you thought outside the box.. nicely done!
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A beautiful background and a softly rippling poem. I am sorry but I must disqualify it from our contest since it is for members only. If you like having a list of title for inspiration then consider joining our group:
http://allpoetry.com/group/show/Titles%20Are%20Us.
Peace, Liz -
I notice
the 'flow' of this poem, like water flowing down a stream - this is the nature of the aquarian. The descriptions are cleaverly provided - not the conventional overt descriptions, but those lying within the nature of this person: "let the truth die with you". Thanks for your entry. Frans
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Beautiful write good luck int the contest.
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This is beautiful and flows very well. Matches wonderfully with the picture. You did very well on writing this poem, great job and good luck in the contest!
♥
-Kaela
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It's pretty. I like the picture too. Nice job. :]
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this is so cool!!!! i love zodiac stuff. i'm leo. this is really good!
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Wow!! This is soo amazing!! I really love this one!! waw...Aquarius child....
alone, forever ...
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*claps and cheers*
NICE!
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i realy loved it great work indded great
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"Aquarius child..."
OMG.
i LOVE this write as is. lol idk what you need to revise O.o
Its great how you contrasted the good and with the bad:
"Born of the Aquarius
smart, talented
hidden secrets, a hushed voice
bearer of truth, but silenced by all
Let the water drown you.. as it eats you on in the inside...
and let the truth die with you"
seriously >.< you're sooooo talented. so keep it up, ne?
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