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- Drifting Manna -

Missing image

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Drifting

gusts of fall scents

sway throughout my insides

Sunrays chilled against windows pane

searching

~*~

Staring

ahead morn takes

moments away from dreams

once spoken yet cast shadows through

my eyes

~*~

Yellow

grain ferments on

dusty blades sewn atop fields

now broken bounties foreclosed tossed

aside

~*~

How do

you slumber past 

heavens gate while children

suffer your wrath causing earth's face

to die

~*~

Hungry

they gather loose

bridles torn from mans plow

your desert promise spoiled heathens

manna

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Author notes

Bear/Sage

 

 

RULES:

 

The top five spots will move on to round two, where rules get sticky-er -
This first round is for the most unique theme I've ever seen -
Now...I will have to let you know, if you don't know me....I DO NOT consider love an uncommon theme...unless you write about love between say,
an octopus and giraffe (just haven't read one like that yet)

Also, religion and politics...no matter how far out will also not be considered uncommon...I don't usually DQ entries -
But, for this round of contests...I am reserving that right for anyone who just can't read, or comprehend -

So with that said...let the game begin!!

Rules:
Reg rules apply
label if adult
Please give me the most out of the box, uncommon write you can...reserve if you wish...points will go up as game goes
on -

Poetic devices are your friend...as well as spell check...
use them both please!

Also:
If I find infractions...I like to im the person and let them have time to edit...so if you want to win...

PLEASE PUT YOUR USERNAME IN THE AN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Also just 'cause I want serious people...
           ...also put your favorite color in the notes -

HAVE FUN!!
A
Cinquain Crown
Syllable Count:
2-4-6-8-2
2-4-6-8-2
2-4-6-8-2
2-4-6-8-2
2-4-6-8-2
2-4-6-8-2
However, I have taken this Crown one step further;
Each 2 Syll L must connect with next 2 Syll L in thought -
In other words, as if there was no new Cinquain beginning -
The last Cinquain wraps back up to first Cinquain in one thought -
The Title is created from First & Last words used in Cinquain Crown -
THEME:
Thoughts of a dying wheatfield amongst a drought-driven season of Summer -

 

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Impressing write using this form...One must study it beyond the read to appreciate the skill needed...Vivid images portrayed here with the mood..Appreciate the rural tones and many visuals that come with this poem! Bravo for your poem!

  • carole21
    October 13, 2008
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    nice write and lovely presentation . . congrats on the HM !!


  • islekine gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Oh thanks...lol

    Somehow, I KNEW you would make me count...and say...
    wow again...Thanks for taking the time to enter...
    I sincerely appreciate it...You're going to have some pretty tough competition in Round Two, my friend...
    Be well and blessed!


  • aboomer silver member
    September 25, 2008
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    (such a pretty form!) - Lovely wording and images! Hard to pick a favorite line - they are all so full of wonderful images.....
    but the following stood out for me:

    'Sunrays chilled against windows pane'...

    Yellow grain ferments on
    dusty blades sewn atop fields
    now broken'

    best wishes in the contest.