The chainsaw that hung over our heads
The stench of rotting meat and flesh
Dont hold your breath,
You'll never get a chance to see
The light of day as seen from here
The fear
It's surreal, almost
The memories we make
In the darkest of places
With a smile on their faces
They used to cut their heads off
One by one, then
Watched them run until
The heart without a mind
Stood still
All in a days' work.
In a list
A contest entry
- Reserve And Wait - Image Prompt Contest by silverscent.
525 points, ended October 1, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Watched them run until
The heart without a mind
Stood still << they were such truthful lines, you incorporated it into your poem brilliantly
All in a days' work. << i loved the ending it had such a sadistic feel to it, that this taking of life was just in a days work
great poem
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amazing. really liked the way you told the story and showed it. dark and perfect. and hey even makes you kinda feel bad for a chicken
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wow this is dark and the beginning is really dark and its almost like you're viewing the world from the chickens viewpoint and than you twist it to a narrative view point. A strong write and a very original use of the prompt. Congrats on your gold
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wow, this is amazing. well deserved of the gold. awesome imagery...congrats
DM
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This is discusting; I love it!
I really enjoyed where you took the image, I would never of thought of it myself.
The imagery was so vivid, it made me feel sick. Well done for having such an effect on me.
Thanks for entering
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Here's an abstract image for you, you can go many ways with this! Oh and I will be judging on the 27th, hope you have enough time to write it.
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g310/silverscent/images%20for%20contest/L-15-1583-tel_aviv_i-Z00DDPLL.jpg
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