Hi
Sweet dear,
Hope you are
Resting in peace.
I miss you a lot.
Do you ever miss me?
Can you hear me in your sleep?
When your heartbeat ceased I felt lost.
I couldn't figure out what to do.
I think my heart stopped the day I lost you.
A contest entry
- Etheree Me Please (Contest) by Paloszoo.
625 points, ended October 6, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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oops, the first word is two syllables. Consider changing the word to "Hi" or something similar and it'll be perfect!
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aaaaw, I've never read an etheree quite like this one before. So sad, and I can relate so well to it! Job well done! Be proud of this one! Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great work!
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Thanks very much :]
It was the first I'd written in this style.
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