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Living Blind


I lived without him,
he lived without me.
I ached everyday,
he never did see.

I dreamed of him
and the way it should be.
I asked and I looked
for where could he be?

I cried a lot
and grew up to be me,
but I never knew
why he just couldn’t see.

This title sucks. too!

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  • Topnotchsy
    September 29, 2008

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    Wow, I think that everyone's been there at one point in time, but the longer it lasts, the harder it is to deal with. Nice write. I don't think there's anything wrong with the title, but how about "Sight Unseen" as a possible suggestion if you are considering changing it.
    Nice write.


  • petalblue2
    September 25, 2008
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    Lovely

    This is so touching and sad. I feel your hurt and disappointment in this piece.


  • Rainydaywoman
    September 24, 2008

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    How about loving blind? I don't think the title sucks. I am so glad to see you back on here writing! YAY!