The echoes of my running footsteps
Resonate through and through
The empty corridors of the majestic
Castle located deep in the forests of my dreams.
I frantically search for you,
Knowing your presence is near,
As the night-fairies on rainbow wings flutter by
and the winds whistle a tune among the leaves.
As the giant oak doors
Swing outwards to reveal
The starry night sky
And the large snowy moon,
I dash out the grand golden entrance,
Into the courtyard as the grandiose
Stone fountain sprays the crystal water
High towards the stars above.
As I glimpse your silhouette on it,
My heart starts to race as
I rush towards the lone bench
Perched high above,
Overlooking the mirror of the night sky.
Author notes
AP name: Chocolate Chip
http://allpoetry.com/Chocolate%20Chip
if you need me to explain anything, just ask. 
dos - amor
A contest entry
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"Overlooking the mirror of the nightsky"
That's a good line to end the poem on, kind of just beautiful for the fact that it's hard to over-look the sky, but with the magical mood you set into the poem, it seems possibubble. ^-^!
GREAT job
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Nice write. Really liked the first stanza, and the background added to the feel of this piece. Best of luck in contests with it.
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wow. 'mirror of the night sky' i REALLY love that line. it is so true. and the rest is pure poetry. such beauty and you show more than tell. amazing job
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thanks for the comment!
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this is amazing!
i love it to bits.
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You have painted a picture of loves grand entrance and awakening with your poetic words.
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cool poem. i don't really get it... but you don't have to explain. i think it means you're looking at the sky and really like it. good job.
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nice imagery here
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It's so beautiful poem!
I liked it a lot!
Like the words you choose here.
Well done
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omg this is stunning, the imagry is just so alive, and paints the most beautiful enchanting picture in my head, i was waiting for the prince to arive and slay the dragon at any minutr, this has a magical mystical ambiance to it, you have a real gift
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the imagary in this is beautiful, creating an atmosphere that draws the reader in, making them wish to read the end...
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this is... for lack of a better word... beautiful. the picture painted here is so exquisite.
well done ^_^
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I love the background and color for this poem =] it really fit the atmosphere. And the ending was beautiful too, I loved how the whole poem was about searching for love, running through the corridors of a palace, kind of gave the poem an exhilarating feeling. So that's why the end fit, it didn't describe meeting the love, just finding it.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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wow. this is really a beautiful poem. loved it from head to toe. imagery was awesome! loevd it, keep penning
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i love it
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Beautiful, Sach!
You never talk to me with such love :'[
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lol.
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You've painted a vivid picture here and it's just lovely. Best of luck to you poet in the contest.....
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The imagery in the this poem is certainly beautiful and powerful. This poem is a gorgeous write indeed!
"The echoes of my running footsteps
Resonate through and through
The empty corridors of the majestic
Castle located deep in the forests of my dreams."
The language you have used is beautiful and I think that you managed to picture what you are writing about perfectly and vividly.
Well done and good luck in the contest!
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i am speachless as ur words have taken mine its beautiful an yet so indescribal! i love this! where u got ur inspireation only god knows but it does'nt matter it perfect beautiful and the concept and theme is magnificent marvelous. thanks for this. its gorgous!
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Beautiful imagery. I really loved this poem. The mood was very mysterious and the imagery was amazing. Great job! Only one thing, the world Spew makes me feel sick lol, and might offend others. But besides that, this was truly amazing. Thanks for entering
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Whoa, I'm jealous. I love the imagery and everything.
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i don't understands it, but i won't ask u to explain anything.
-CHEEZERBRAINS!!
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As I glimpse your silhouette on it,
My heart starts to race as
I rush towards the lone bench
I love the emotion in this piece
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Nice imagery.
Stone fountain spews crystal water
High towards the stars above.
I found those lines really interesting, since it combines the elegance of "crystal," "fountain," and "stars" with something cruder, like "spew."
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wow wow wow!!!
this is so incredibly beautiful ima nominate ya for front page
so so deep and with some of the richest imagery i've seen... loved it .. lol ... incase you couldnt tell .. what a power house of art you have here... you truly have a gift ~teddybare~
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i think it is thats why i just nominated it :D
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oh kool!!!! thank you!!! and thanks for the comment!!!
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is it really that good????? that good for a front page??????
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Wow! I've been meaning to comment but I jus tdon't get time!
I told you I love it!!
Like all of your other poems lol.
I think I told you I added it to my collection on my ipod...Did i? lol can't remember!
It's soooooooooooooooooo-ooooooooooooooooooo-ooooooooooooo beautiful. God you beat me back!
lOVE yA LOTS!
great job babe!
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lmao!! luv ya too!!
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written beautifully, and not simple rhyme scheme in it. i think ninety percent of the people on this website could learn from you that poetry doesn't have to rhyme to be amazing. I love your use of senses. The echoes of my running footstep resonate... and your style alone is very attractive. Great job
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WOW
its so beautiful i almost cried choco <3 its amazing *tear tear* wish i cold write as well as you *hugs you tenderly* Please never stop writing *starts crying from its amazingness*
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lol. i don't think i wanna stop. lol.
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wow, you are too good!!!!!!!!!!!! i thought this was AMAZINGLY WRITTEN, DUDIO!!!!!!!!! holy gosh allmighty that was too great of a poem, it's unbelievable!
"I dash out the grand golden entrance,
Into the courtyard as the grandiose
Stone fountain spews crystal water
High towards the stars above."
that is my favorite stanza of your superfabulous awesome poem, man! oh, fabulous work! why isn't this in a contest? bcuz it really needs to be entered in one =)
niceness!
hugglez,
-adria <3
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than kuuu!!!
abt the contest...can't find one for it. lol.
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LOVE!
This is definitely one of my faves! You should have entered my contest! You would have made it to the finals!
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contest? oops. forgot. lol. but i don't usually enter contests.
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What a lovely fantasy. It reminds me of the beautiful princess finally finding her prince and then living happily ever after! I loved the imagery.
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