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Monozygotic Yearnings

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One minute at a time, that’s all I can do,
to try to exist in a world without you,
something magical happened so long ago,
why it occurs, no one will ever know,
in our mother's womb, we formed and we grew,
silent communication being our only tool,
'monozygotic' is the technical term used
for a mystical union of two identical souls,
loneliness was alien, a foreign emotion,
we had each other - such a beautiful potion.

Our souls were entwined, as were our bodies,
as we formed a bond so incredibly melodic,
when it was time to be born, did we decide?
Who would go first - who would stay behind?
For only five minutes separated were we,
then thrust into life for the start of our journey.
Many was the milestones we faced and we shared,
mirror images of each other, yet always compared,
so many moments, too many to mention,
unspoken words in another dimension.

We walked hand in hand into our future,
always assured of the others love and nurture,
life passed in a blur, it usually does,
days become weeks and then soon it’s a month,
a year, or a decade, entwined as we were,
sharing existence in this everyday world,
then came a time when the clock stopped ticking,
when her heart ceased its rhythmical beating,
I’ll remember that moment, etched for all eternity,
when I lost the precious other half of me.

I bent over her body, five minutes late was I,
when she took her last breath and quietly died,
I touched her face and committed it to memory,
something that was completely unnecessary,
for all I have to do is go look in a mirror.
to see her reflection stare back with such sorrow,
so sure was I that she were still breathing,
that she hadn’t left me alone with the living,
but I was mistaken for she had already departed,
along with my sanity, such unending heartache.

How frantic was I, deranged and bereft
of the life I had known till she died and she left,
now tears are my new constant companion
as I try to piece together what is left of our union.
Right now I am raw, broken in pieces,
for today is our birthday, the one that we shared,
how can I celebrate when she’s no longer there?
The time of our birth has become tainted with sorrow,
and I know not how to face all my lonely tomorrows,
If I could simply erase this momentous day,
I would do so to forget the unbearable pain.

I miss you more than you’ll ever know,
I hear your voice everywhere that I go,
I feel your presence and know you are near,
but I can’t hold you close or see that you’re here.
My only comfort is you will never know the feeling
of losing me first and the agony of existing,
alone in a world where we were each other's history.

One day in the future, reunited we shall be,
side by side with each other, just you and me,
we’ll catch up on news and smile at each other,
at the journey we were so lucky to spend together.


Your star still shines brightly each time I look out
at the night sky which highlights your radiant light.

 


 

 

 

 

Author notes

A poem dedicated to my identical twin sister...Sheila ...who died on 05/04/2007.
I wanted to describe the utter devastation of losing my identical twin...my 'other half' and last but not least...a tribute to her.
We came into this world together...she left alone...and now I am too!

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  • Yemassee gold member
    September 11

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    Well that is a hurt that I cannot even begin to understand the enormity of. I will say that I am sorry for your loss, but that's the usual rhetoric everyone says.

    But it must be a strange but rewarding thing to be a twin, to have that connection, that similarity. At the same time there must have been a need to define your own individuality.


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    August 10

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    A wonderful tribute to your twin sister
    Heartfelt and  tender full of love and yearning for her

    A good write, well done


  • Sonya-Erasmus silver member
    August 9

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    What a beautiful tribute.
    This is so sad.
    Even though my sister is 18 months older than me, she feels like my twin, and I can't imagine my life without her.
    I was so moved by the line

    "touched her face and committed it to memory,"

    and

    "for all I have to do is go look in a mirror.
    to see her reflection stare back with such sorrow,"

    It's a description of pure pain.

    Thanks so much for sharing this.
    Best of luck in the contest


  • ladybug.
    May 30

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    I am so sorry for your loss. It was beautiful and very touching. I'm thankful that you shared it with me and the rest of us here on AP. Thank you for entering it into my contest.

  • http://allpoetry.com/poem/4300087

    A little something I wrote that might help a bit.
    Do you have other siblings? So you know what 'normal' was like? Or a trusted friend? How much more was being a twin! I have read about the phenomena. You were privileged... Would it have been better to never have known the wonderful connection? There are mysteries left to us. Have you heard of transplant memory? Where the receipient of an organ acquires attributes, feelings, moods and memories from the donor? Hoping for some meaningful resolutions for you...

    • Mariana gold member
      May 7
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      Wise words indeedy. Thanks for pointing this out to me. In response to your questions. Yes, I have two brothers and one sister still present. My twin was the first of the siblings to pass. Yes, I know what 'normal' is like. Yes, I am all too aware of how incredibly blessed I was to share my life with my identical twin. Words cannot describe the bond we had. I wrote that poem at a time when my grief was overwhelming. I am now in a better place.

      I have heard of transplant memories. There is so much we have yet to understand. The more I learn about this life, the less I know. I thank you for your kind comment regarding my finding resolutions to life's many trials.

      The loss of an identical twin is a phenomenon that needs much more research, not only for those who are twins but for all mankind. Anything that leads to more understanding can never be a bad thing. I have reached a place of peace, content in the knowledge that I was so privileged to have shared my life with my twin and although she is gone, she is still here. One day we will be together again.



      I have done some research on identical twins which helped me realise that what I was feeling was 'normal'. In fact, the research on the surviving twins experience echoes my own. I will leave a link here to one web-page I found particularly enlightening.



      It is interesting to note that my twin and I never discussed losing one another. It was something we couldn't contemplate. Here's to the journey of life we all undertake and to lessons that we learn along the way. Sorry about the long message, I got a tad carried away.


      http://allpoetry.com/journal/5750---Once-There-Were-Two--

      Mariana

  • when it was time to be born, did we decide?
    Who would go first - who would stay behind?


    love these lines.great write.

  • abu nuwas
    May 6

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    Very touching. Perhaps it could be cut by about two thirds, the metre kept even, yet the rhymes more complex (ABAB ?), which might match the feeling and sharpen the mood.

    • Mariana gold member
      May 7
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      Thank you for your comment regarding my poem. I appreciate your taking the time to critique it. This poem will most likely be re-written at some point.

  • first let me tell you how my heart goes out to you...I am so sorry for your loss...
    this poem is a true testement to the strength and bond of your love...God be with you as you continue moving forward with your life...peace and light always...kp

  • i had to look up the word monozygotic - from a single egg. yes this is as the other but with changes yes?


  • individuality gold member
    April 29
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    send me the link again tomorrow as my esyes are mad with drink


  • Denerica
    April 24

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    Excellent!

    Definately a heart and soul poem, I have twin step daughters and in the back of my mind I think about one day when they are adults in older age, what it would be like if one had to separate forever, they fight like any sisters would, but they do connect, it's been awesome to watch, I am sorry for you loss, you handle it well with you write, I thank God we have our writing to make us stronger in any pain and trial we are facing. Blessings.


  • Gratitude
    March 25

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    Ouch... RIP Sheila. A really heart-wrenching, emotional piece deserving of all the trophies. Well written, and I'm sorry for your loss.

    God bless!

  • This is ssooo heartwrenching, but it's beautiful. With such a personal write, I really don't know what to say. I just feel so very sad knowing this, but I can tell that you are strong and they will always care for you too.


  • Truetome
    March 10

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    what to share about such an incredible life history? you expressed very well within this tribute the sorrow and mourning. I could not imagine, what this would feel like, I wish you all the best in your recovery from loss... and joy in her memory...

    • Mariana gold member
      March 11
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      Thank you...I am not sure how to recover from her loss. It's been almost two years and still it hurts as if it were yesterday


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    March 8

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    wow well deserved trophies there.This actually has me in tears, such a beautiful dedication, thankyou so much for sharing this with me xx


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    February 26

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    OMG Mariana.....

    Harshness... And another thing we share. I was also a twin.

     

    (However, maybe I was lucky in that Mine died at birth... I spent a good deal of my teenage years missing her. Wishing that she was around so I wouldn't feel so alone, wondering if she would have been another me, if we'd have liked the same things, gone to the same school... You know, I;ve never written about this!! Maybe I should!)

     

    God, you actually got a chance to know yours, and I guess that's worse, because you know what you are missing... Oh, I'd hug you right now.

     

    You are an amazing character... an awesome writer...You Rock!

    • Mariana gold member
      February 27
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      Yet another thing we have in common. Thank you for your beautiful comment. I think you should write about your twin.

      Whenever Sheila crosses my mind...which is practically all the time...I always need a hug...thanks for saying you would hug me if you could.

      You Sis! 's and


  • Symphony
    February 16

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    This was heartbreaking, I wonder - have you seen the filming The Secret Life of Bees? I viewed it last night, and in it, was a twin whose sister had died when they were young, but their bond was very much similar to the one you described here, and the sister that was living felt so broken without her twin still living -

    The most moving part of this poem, for me, had to be this section,

    "But I can’t hold you close or see that you’re here
    My only comfort is you will never know the feeling
    Of losing me first and the agony of existing
    Alone in a world where we were each others history"

    Which is so tragic, I couldn't put words to it, and I imagine so many people could identify with this!

    Absolutely heart-wrenching poem you've penned here, yet what a beautiful dedication to your sister. I'm so sorry for your loss


  • Daisy Ballerina
    January 6

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    That's sooooo beautiful...
    I have two 2 year-old twin baby sisters, identical..

    Thank you for entering my contest!!!


  • PastelMoons gold member
    January 5

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    This brought me to tears
    thank you so much
    for entering my contest
    and for sharing the depths
    of your loss

    ~Pastel

  • Wow, So sad & yet so beautiful...

    Brought a lump to my throat as I read...
    So full of passion, sorrow & loss with such raw emotional depth & heartfelt dialogue...
    Kinda left me a tad speechless, such was the impact of the narrative...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • Manda-Lou
    December 31, 2008
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    Wonderful job. It was quite long but elegantly done. Im sorry for the loss. Good luck.


  • Rheea gold member
    December 29, 2008
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    This must have been so very hard, lovely write. You took my heart.


  • camus gold member
    December 28, 2008

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    Breathtaking

    Wow- it was an emotional rollercoaster reading that poem. I have to say that it is incredibly emotive and poignant, Rose. The beauty of the poem is that it allows the reader a brief glimpse into the shared and sacred world you had with Sheila and that glimpse is enough to offer us an awareness of the bond that death cannot cheat - an indissoluble bond that is both touching and haunting. Tony x


  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 24, 2008

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    I can tell you two were close, and what a nightmare come true to lose a dear reflection of you. Sorry for your loss, know I'm here if ya ever need to talk, peace.

    -Timothy


  • Danna Hobart
    December 21, 2008
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    So sorry that you have lost your other half. This is a lovely tribute to her.


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    My eyes are tear-ridden!

    I don't know where to begin. This write is so deeply personal and moving. How hard it must be for you to have lost your identity, so to speak; the identity of your twin who was you too.

    This seems to be something that we all face in different levels in life. But, ah, yours is so fresh and real. I think that your twin and you are the closest that two human beings can be. So much alike are you two, way more than a mother/child. An image of the other. I can't imagine. I too, will never find my other half. For nothing else ever compares to that. They would want us to continue on in life, and be happy. Your twin wants that for you!

    Agonizing. How hard it must be to feel her so close but not be able to reach out and touch her! I am missing my mother right now. She died in 1982 and she was all I had. My first son was born that year, and I have been told, as I felt; that he is her reincarnation. The anniversary of her death is on the 20th of December and her birthday is the 29th.

    It is really something how people seem to choose their deaths. She died one day after my birthday, and almost a week before her own. I feel she was saying something. I too found comfort in the realization that we will be reunited again one day. We are even now, as you are with your twin. karen


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    DEEPLY TOUCHING!!!!

    I am afraid I do not have words for this poem's Your words, your heart is felt in each and every one. As one reads there is not a need for words just read and let ones heart take over.'s


  • floofy
    December 13, 2008
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    I'm sorry for your loss
    So touching.


  • Stevie.me
    December 11, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Maggie this is wonderful ,sad but wonderful .
    It made me cry ,its sooooo good.


  • justgot2loveme
    December 8, 2008

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    This is too beautiful for words.
    This is one of the most touching poems
    I remeber reading. I am so very sorry for your loss.
    This piece made me cry from the start to the very end. I think you made your sister proud.
    Thanks for sharing and good luck.

    Justgot2loveme


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    December 6, 2008
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    such a brave recant,,, an unburdening,,you are a great poet


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 26, 2008
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    oh my god..

    I'm so very sorry..i have no words..intensely touching..


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    November 13, 2008

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    I don't know how to compare this to the one for your mother. ( so I just won't even try ) THey are both more than worth the GOLD Trophies they won. I must admit when I finished reading this beautiful tribute to your Sister i felt a tear slide down my right cheek. I am happy to have you on my favorite list and will add you to mine.
    God Bless
    ED.


  • Nicada silver member
    November 6, 2008
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    This is so sad, but also so beautiful. What a wonderful tribute to the special bond that twins share. My mother was a twin, though not identical. She unfortunately died at the age of 29,before I could know her. This poem is truly straight from your heart, and this brought tears to my eyes. A very touching write, and thanks so much for sharing it. Thanks for entering. Blessings, Patty

  • Bob Fox
    October 25, 2008
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    Poet

    All I can say is sad, sweet and beautiful. I have learned something today

  • SilentMoonlight
    October 15, 2008

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    This was greatly written and a heart wrenching tribute. It was so powerful it hits with every word and every description. I'm sorry for your loss dear

    Thank you for entering!


    • Mariana gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      Thank You...I am glad you thought this was powerful. I appreciate the feedback


  • smonte19124 gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    Brilliant Write


    You are definitely a poet for you have poured out your pain with words that will touch the heart of all that read. As the prompt says you have written me to tears. I too know the lost of a twin though not identical. I feel that there is a hole in my soul and no matter what; I can never fill it until we're together again. I had 45 years with her but it wasn't enough. I understand and give you my heartfelt sympathy because its been six years and yet it still feels like only yesterday she went away. God Bless You, Jo-Ann

    • Mariana gold member
      October 14, 2008
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      Thank You! I had 44 years with my twin...I agree with you...there is never enough time spent with loved ones.
      I am so sorry for your loss.
      I appreciate your comments and kind thoughts.
      Take care always.

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