She gazed slowly into his eyes
He placed his hand around her waist
Fluidity cannot disguise
The romance building in this place
While in his arms she is embraced
The music stops but they still sway
Their fingers remain interlaced
They learned to dance in Monterey
Author notes
This was inspired by a picture I have of my Grandparents on their honeymoon in 1930.
A contest entry
- Form Contest - Huitain by CitrineSunrise.
900 points, ended October 11, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This poem struck a special note with me since I live in Monterey (California). Your verse echoes the rhythm of the dance and is perfect for the message delivered. Because this form of poetry calls for a set formatting I think it would have added the reader's pacing if you had used a little punctuation. That did not detract from the beauty of this poem, however. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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Ahh..I can hear the music! Nicely done, poet. Best to you in the contest!
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I like this poem. I dont understand what makes it Spanish style unless it is. Am I being really dense?
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