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A little night-muzak while we wait


 

We can gaze at constellations, through the rash

                                            haze of streetlamps;

We can fetch fat bullfrogs to bait our hooks for

                                                 catching rattlers;

We can dodge bullets; we can go play pattycake

                                           on the edge of town;

We can stall until all choice is flown, blown, like

                                                 old rosebeds; or

We can our talk, play The Walk Of Love, and fuck

                                          like branded demons.

 

 
 

Author notes

I wanted lines like a handful of lost piano-hammers

                                                scattered on the deck;

I wanted to make a play on words so you’d think

                                                  you’d read it wrong;

I wanted your fingers touching the lines as if they

                                                             were Braille.

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  • deercatcher
    October 4, 2008

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    Make me work for it...

    This an exercise in ... karma? contradiction in terms? each line is a contradiction...

    You have to avoid the halogen eyes of harsh creatures to clearly see one's stars

    Why waste a fat bullfrog to obtain a snake that might kill you? And is the practice an original thought (you are quite the enigma)




  • Mirthryl
    October 2, 2008

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    Very nicely done.
    The author notes touched a deeper chord with me, and I would have given you gold for them.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 2, 2008
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      Sometimes my notes are another chapter of what I'm trying to say, rather than just notes.


  • nevadapoet
    September 25, 2008
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    a brillant write...very nicely done.


  • Amera gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    I'm amazed at the oroginal and unique structure. Youe image here fills volumes. Yay!!!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • moon2u
    September 25, 2008
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    hehehe
    well you have succeeded! I love it hehehe


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 24, 2008
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    Amusingly brilliant, throughout.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 24, 2008
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      I am glad you liked it. I had my doubts, but then I'm in that frame of mind lately. Thank you.


  • Salt Therapy
    September 24, 2008
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    We can our talk ?

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 24, 2008
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      Yes, "can" as in terminate, put a lid on - it's a play on words, using an alternative meaning for the "can" of the rest of the poem.


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 24, 2008

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    i have a couple of fat bullfrogs in the
    pond, but i don't think i could use them
    as bait...i've named them already!

    I like the playfulness of this write.
    Makes me want to hug you, so here:

    Love, Lane


  • PerVirtuous
    September 24, 2008
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    I choose E. Thanks for the chuckles, have some bunnies.

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 24, 2008

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      This wasn't a multiple-choice question, Allan. This girl can't be bought by bunnies (but thanks anyway - stowing them in my kist)!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 24, 2008

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    It matters little what form of poetry you are asked for
    It matters little what the subject
    It matters little what I am doing
    It only matters that I like your poetry


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 24, 2008
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      Repeat after me...

      ... we shall fight them on the beaches...

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