Heartache surrounds my heartbeats
In the circle of love hate relationship
My heart has chained me in restraints
I stand alone in the room down on my knees
Hoping to break free
…I’m boxed in the perfect square
Of love, heartbreak
Apologies and forgiveness…
Through the prism of your eyes
Reflections of confusion sparkle
Alluring words written in butter
Slide through my waiting ears
Landing on my heart bleeding
…I stand at the tip of the pyramid
Of the broken relationship alone destroyed
Looking down I see the valley of pain…
Mystery of defined love story
Shatters into million pieces
Questions are still stuck
To the metallic sphere of lies
Blinding my open eyes
Seeking right answers
…I hear the stained truth
I love you to death, you say
I misunderstood to be only a metaphor
But you meant every word you said…
Heart still bleeds in your love
Another chance you seek to make up
Mistakes we both made yet again
You getting caught in a triangle
Whisking away with someone else
And me trusting you
…I know Forgiving & forgetting
Is like walking on the path of God
But I just found, I’m only human
Who when pricked, bleeds…
Author notes
Option 10 Using geometrical shapes - I've used following shapes - circle, square, prism, pyramid, sphere, triangle.
In a list
A contest entry
- Abstract Options For Bizarre Poets xD by KyleBerg.
1750 points, ended October 8, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh my dear! What a great job you did on this one! I love the entire read, and to try to find another way to say that would be wrong! I tried to pick a favorite part and that just can not be done! This entire read is fantastic! Great job!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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I sometimes find it hard to hold on to that fact, i like how you held onto it in this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest. strong poem my friend strong poem.
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Ohh, this is great! Very moving and inventive. Congrats on using SIX of the shapes
I loved this part --
"…I’m boxed in the perfect square
Of love, heartbreak
Apologies and forgiveness…"
-- actually i loved it ALL, that part was just my favourite, as well as the ending - spectacular! It was a great idea, i like the way the poem doesn't actually revolve around the shapes, just uses them to add to the imagery. Very well done!
You're very talented, thanks for entering
Best of luck
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