I always think there's someone watching me
when there's no one really there.
I always think my mom loves me..
when she don't really care
I always think I've got a soul-mate
when that's not true
I always wish there was day with no arguments
but that will never happen.
I always wish my body shape was much thinner..
but I don't stick to diets.
I always wish I wrote better poems because this one is lame
and so is my other poetry its just the same!
I always wonder.. what my future will be
don't be stupid tash you wont even get a GCSE
I always wonder..why I have the best sister in the world
maybe because she actually loves me.. unlike everyone else.
I always wonder how I became such a good friend
probably because I listen and have a good personality.
I always end my poems In such a stupid way
well yeah that's really what I wanted to say.
Author notes
OK I wrote this poem when I was ill off school just random really and its kind of lame and it sucks but oh-well.
Natasha
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I dont know wether you'll like it..
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I always wish I wrote better poems because this one is lame
and so is my other poetry its just the same!
ahem....i beg to differ. you're poetry is beautiful. [don't argue the point, you know i'm right.] (that was jokingly said btw)But honestley if I didn't think it was good, I wouldn't be sitting here writing you a novel on every other poem lol -
your poetry isnt always the same....but i like them...nice write...keep up the good work
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well, it's simple, it's staight foreward, like a slap in the face, really. But I like it, because it's raw and powerful
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plain and simple
wow... plain and simple
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Uhmm.... I like it...
It flows very well… perfectly written!
Natasha, I can relate to your poems … they are full of emotions and this one was no different…. I enjoyed reading it! but this was sad to feel that you’re thinking that way…
But Nice to know that you’re gifted with bestest sister in the world…. I wish you all the best…
I’ll be looking forward for more of your poem …
God Bless You! and take care of yourself!
Shuberth
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I like that you said what you wanted to here.
There were several stanzas I loved..
I always think my mom loves me..
when she don't really care
I always wish my body shape was much thinner..
but I don't stick to diets.
It's sad that you think so little of yourself. And great that you have someone to love.
This poem has a good rhythm to it. -
Nice work. Best of luck to you.
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I also love it. I love poetry where one expresses themselves and their feelings. I feel that's the best kind of poetry there is. Great job sweet Natasha.
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I LOVE it!
A very expressive poem, and definitely what I feel like most of the time!
Whether others like it or not, this is how you really feel, and putting something personal onto paper is an achievement in itself!
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I think there were a few mistakes, and it would have been better if it rhymed, or didn't rhyme. I dunno the rhyme was off, but other tahn that it is really good.
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OK. Well some grammar mistakes like 'when she don't really care' Should be' when she disn't really care. It good you did the poem. I like you reapeting 'I always wonder'.
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