How can you know
what loves is today
When all you know is
pain and suffering?
Don't play those games
with my broken heart
When all I do is
pick up the pieces.
What have I done
To deserve this trash
you call life
take me out of it.
I'm filthy to the core
I'm not your bloody muse
Don't take it back
I can't take this pain
Love fails all
it never really existed
I loved you forever
and you betrayed me
Author notes
*Be yourself, don't take any-ones shit and Never Let Them Take You Alive*
A contest entry
- Awake and Unafraid. by alexandra..
1000 points, ended November 30, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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In some places it doesn't really flow, in some places it works brilliantly.
"Don't play those games
with my broken heart
When all I do is
pick up the pieces."
Nice.
"I'm filthy to the core.
I'm not your bloody muse"
Very Nice.
"this trash
you call life"
Very, very, very nice.
The content could do with a little more organising. It doesn't seem to make much sense in the way it jumps around.
goodluck.
x.
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I love the band that inspired this...
and you did a great job with the whole poem in general...when i read it i think about some of there lyrics ^_^
i especially like the part:
"What have I done
To deserve this trash
you call life
take me out of it."
*~A.M.A.Z.I.N.G~*
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Good job
i really liked it esp. "I loved you forever and you betrayed me" also " you call life take me out of it" Very Good
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It can take a long time to realize our own self-worth and value ourselves enough to speak out against, maybe treatment others are used to giving or what we have led others to believe is acceptible. You voice yourself loud and clear. We all have the need to feel significant; it is a basic human need. So we are all succeptable to deciet from those claiming to value us
Don't give up on Love!
Great write
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