The whispering wind, the singing bird,
Oh! Nature's melody is the sweetest joy ever heard.
On her notes of prevailing beauty, I sit, float and stare,
At the world, which thanks to her, now seems so fair.
She carries me across lands and seas,
Magical worlds with singing trees.
Her fairies sing a song for me,
And yes, in an instant, I'm alive and free.
The pitter-patter of the rain,
Nature's melody, my worries, she does drain.
The hush of the serene breeze,
The wild forest's soft sigh,
Indeed, I am completely at ease
And yes, upon her melody, I fly.
Skies surrounding me are no more grey,
Sadness and worries, her music has willed them all away.
I bid farewell to the misery around,
'fore when her music sounds,
I'm on heavenly grounds.
Oh Music, fair lady! I thank you,
For the sweet escape you provide,
Forever, to you and for you, I shall be true,
And forever, in just you, I will daily confide.
Author notes
Music is my all. I don't think I'll ever be able to live with out it. The way it makes me feel and I just love it all. All genres, etc. Over here, in this piece, I decided to write about 'Nature's Melody'
In a list
A contest entry
- Its Mine by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
450 points, ended September 29, 2008, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Passion by Rhythm Child.
550 points, ended December 8, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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A great entry
thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent so take care
message me for anything
Billy (Rhythm Child)
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congrads on the bronze and i have to say after all those sad poems it is nice to read something like this from a golden poet, such as yourself, keep it flowing
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Yes, I can see how this one won a trophy. It is well deserved. I like the picture. Goes well with the poem and the background is interesting as well. I like your rhyming. It did not seem forced at all. You wrote a very good poem here. Good job and thanks for entering my contest.
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~sigh~
What a calming and charming song/poem this is
Congrats on the Bronze!
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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I bid farewell to the misery around,
'fore when her music sounds,
I'm on heavenly grounds.
Oh Music, fair lady! I thank you,
For the sweet escape you provide,
You're adorable in this write. Your love music comes through loud and clear, and sweet and soft at the same time. I absolutely love this side of your writing. So far, I see dark
. . these writes are good too, but when you're ready.
P.S
I see your new pic, and you're so pretty.
Keep this up girl, and I'll have to say I knew you when you were a nobody
much love, and you're really going somewhere here,
jin
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Beautiful poem! So wonderfully written and full of great imagery. Well done. Good luck in the contest and congrats on the bronze in the other contest.
best wishes as always
Autumn Whisper
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cute poem
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How very beautiful..Love the lines "Magical worlds with singing trees," also like your last verse.
Charming to read.
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I really enjoyed this. You brought this feeling of serenity with your words. I really love how you seem to give the Earth Mother such personality. Great job!!
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I thought you'd win this. You really deserved the gold trophy for this one! Music is my weakness.
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The pitter-patter of the rain,
Nature's melody, my worries, she does drain.
The hush of the serene breeze,
The wild forest's soft sigh,
Indeed, I am completely at ease
And yes, upon her melody, I fly. that was ahmazing thanks for entering :]
..<3..
Shelly -
SO SWEET!!!!!
One with open heart can feel the wonders around them and as they do all their troubles seem so far away.
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hmmm...
i like the theme of this poem. it's true that the simplest of pleasures in life, that we don't ourselves create. but...do me a favor and read this out loud. some of the rhythms are a little funky. you have too many words where simplicity would be best. try to make the rhythms fall into each other. beat it out on the table, and see if you can't edit it out a little to make the flow more complete. overall a great write. keep it up!
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Music is everything to me as well dear poet. Thank you so very much for your comments on my work.
This poem is so light and lovely. It reminds me of a soft springtime breeze. The vocabulary is eloquent and the punctuation adds such espression. It is a lovely write to read. Thanks for sharing it And thank you again for your comments on my work. Tis grand to have a fan 
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I like this piece although I am not a fan of rhyme at all, it always feels forced and full of unessecary words lol. Great job I love nature too. Best to you in the contest
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Wow. That is all I can truly say. I know rhyming poetry is hard to pull off and no make it sound forced but you have indeed done just that. Bravo my friend. Never let your ink dry before you write again.
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Excessivly Good
Excellent choice of words, making it flow freely and efficiently.
Very enjoyable to read
I especially liked the part 'Nature's melody, my worries, she does drain'
Good luck with the contest, you will do very well with it
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Yes, music is like water when you're thirsty and life when you're dead. Music is the soul of nature and that you discribed very well here in this poem. I liked and enjoyed it. It seems we both have the same views about nature, the wind whispers and even the sound of grass as it dances with the wind, true nature's melody.
You're a great writer, I enjoyed how you rhyme your poem with ease and no clichs.
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Go0d flow of the rhyming verse--Tranquil and serene as well as a soothing read.
Well Done & best of luck in the contest!
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"Wo-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-ow omg I liked this SOOOO much you have no idea, I totally got all absorbed and let my imagination take me away to some perfect land of laughing springs and whispering trees...oh, I'm rambling. Hehe and I sound kinda weird to don't I? Anyway, GOOD work, I give you three clappies!"
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Rival
It seems you have a way just like me with rhyming words. To me there is nothing better then a poem that rhymes. This poem is really great and it would be a crime if you didn't win in the contest!
This is excellent!
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Oh my! I totally agree with you! I LOVE music!! You did lovely!!
Oh Music, fair lady! I thank you,
For the sweet escape you provide,
Forever, to you and for you, I shall be true,
And forever, in just you, I will daily confide.
beautiful.
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awww, this has a lovely flow to it, and is just so beautiful *hugs*
good luck in the contes and take care
Stephanie ♥
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I really like the title you've chosen for this and all of the words you've used to describe something you love so dearly. You can really tell it means a lot to you ^-^. And descriptions of sound in poems are something I really like =].
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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Beautiful the imagery and thoughts are to fuel anyones muse.
Truly crafted in brilliance of words
I look forward to reading so much more
Best wishes
Julie
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"Very nice, a fine piece. Welcome to the site, my best wishes always."
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Music
Music is everyone's life, and it is a way of locking yourself out, or a way of invoking thoughts. I like how you described the various emotions one would feel by just listening to music. I commend you on your good poetry. Awesome!
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