clandestine kiss
floats like a feather
to breezes folly
tender
traces of breath
teasingly toy
with flowing tresses
slender skin
willingly surrenders
a supple sigh
areolas flush
amid a delicate dance
of amorous digits
sanguine smiles
of pleasured serenity
wrapped up in
satin sheets
incense plumes
its pristine perfume
into the air
immersing all it touches
with a hint of passion and peach
moonlight mingles
in measured steps
with souls in ecstasy's cradle
languishing within
a liquid lullably
as though they were
moments melting in the sun
oh what devilish desires
dare to delude the senses
when one breathes deep
the sprinkles of stardust.
Author notes
prompt: stardust (with a central theme connecting it to love in some way)
A contest entry
- Pick Words Like Flowers Quickie (48 hrs) by poet2angels.
475 points, ended September 27, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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Wonderfully penned
I enjoyed this very much. The imagery is gorgeous.
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WOW... This was beautiful! I just love this part
"moonlight mingles
in measured steps
with souls in ecstasy's cradle". Amazing poem!
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Soft, tender and delicate words that lure a poor lass into surrendering to you her heart.
This is a beautiful poem. If I were reading this on a soft and warm summer's night, I would be crying.
The onlt fault I found is the 2nd Stanza, 3rd Line: "teasingly toy" should I feel be "teasingly toying".
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This is one of my favorites I am just letting you know I added you as a fav, As i have ur mom she is a great writer.(must run in the family) amd im not sure who crazylittledevil is to you but i love the work i can relate thanks for making my day
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Thank you I just read your page and understand a little of the carnage that may well be running through your mind constantly, crazylittledevil is a woman that I look after ie; make sure she has her medication, cook meals for, monitor in the shower etc to make sure she is safe - she has tried to self harm on several occasions. I have returned the favour of adding you to my faves, if you ever need to get something off your chest you can call on me.
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This is gorgeous! So romantic and breathtaking as elegant as stardust itself....
How could it be anymore beautiful!
Ty for entering...
Lynda
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How am i suppose to win when you enter stuff like this
ugh!
languishing within
a liquid lullably
as though they were
moments melting in the sun
give me a chance at least (._.) *bunny* brillient
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lol thanks for the compliment, I never expect to win, but to be inspired in such a way is a victory. write with passion and you never know where it will take you. best wishes to you my friend
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This was certainly too much too take! Marvellous job! But you're experieced in this aren't you? So i dont think you have worked too hard on this!!! hahaha!! It's brilliant, the whole way through.
Bravo!
Love and light,
lencio
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thank you my friend, always a pleasure to have you stop by and read my work. That reminds me I'll have to write another lento sometime, it's such a cool form to use.
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