Twin
for life –
happiness
and loneliness;
one is incomplete
if another’s missing
for air they take in is the
core of the soul of each other
and what we feel of their division’s
just a split moment of bewilderment
of our small minds full of expectations;
but what heaven conjoins forever
our hearts would fin’lly realize
that loneliness complements
the state of happiness;
they’re eternal twins
we must accept
so we could
truly
live.
Author notes
Etheree consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. It can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.
A contest entry
- Etheree Me Please (Contest) by Paloszoo.
625 points, ended October 6, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Insightful comments are truly appreciated
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So true
My Mom was a twin and its as though their minds were connedted always for they could feel when the other was in pain its amazing this was -
Very nice write
Twins as my mother was a twin and yes they do live as one in so many ways its as though they can sense each others feeling joys and pains -
Good and truthful write here
I do believe twins shares the inner thoughts and visions they must share and do dhare no matter how far apart they are . Good write .My Mom was a twin
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Verly lovely and written with great depth. I love the subject matter. Very interesting thoughts. Love it! Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great work!
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Wow an etheree! what more it is double plus it's amazing, the toughts are concise in some certain syllables. Can you be my teacher?
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beautiful; simply beautiful, you wove this one so neatly it is just in a state of perfection ..... wow
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What a wonderful double Etheree! It’s smooth, flowing and the message is captivating. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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