Y O U say you love me so d_e_e_p_l_y.
But b/e/f/o/r/e too long you'll be a m.e.m.o.r.y.
Just another trace of my mind
another trick of M
[[IjustNEEDtobeonmyo.w.n.]] A
I don't mind being all A N
I need to think and be, L K
Someone I can call me. O I
You don't fit into my plaN N
I don't think you ever can.E D
[[Imsorryifthisbreaksyourheart]]
but my world is t.o.r.n.a.p.a.r.t.
I c a n n o t l o v e l i k e t h i s.
I can't EVEN accept YOUR kiss.
I t/h/i/n/k I forgot how to love,
or m a y b e my h|e|a|r|t| has had enough.
c-a-u-s-e-i-n-e-e-d-t-o-b-l-e-e-d-f-r-e-e...
SO b/e/f/o/r/e too long you'll be MY m.e.m.o.r.y.
Author notes
Before too long you'll be a memory... number 17
I am very new to dirty pretty.. so forgive me.
A contest entry
- I feel so dirty[[pretty]] --With a ~twist~-- by BenziRae.
720 points, ended November 19, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Do what you like.. I am not your brain...
Comments
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not to be rude, but honestly, to inform you, dirty pretty isnt just a bunch of random puncuation/ symbols inserted randomly into a poem. In fact, it doesn't neccesairly have anything to do with how a poem LOOKS. just so ya know ;]
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Not bad at all. I liked the idea ^^
The rhyming did seem a bit forced, and the down/slanted words became a bit confusing. However, all in all, it was a good piece ^^
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This is the very first 'dirty pretty' poem i have ever read. Writing is truly is an art form, and i am all for freedom of expression. I don't think I could write dirty pretty without going insane (ha) - what really surprised me though, was the poem itself. It's very good! Thanks for opening my eyes a little on this form of poetry. Love, Lane
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yeah its not really my style but i tried it out. i really liked using it though. it kinda frees your writing to what you want and you arent limited to anuthing..
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