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the crew, the love, the grave

and if we ever die before we wake,
it will be long before we fall asleep
but i left the stars still sparkling for me
we found the wind, but we got in too deep
we're no match for the sea

send out the S.O.S.
and tell me that you need me now
i know just how this will end up
so brace yourself, we're going down
are you better off without me now?
so far away
well it ain't half as cold as it will be
so tell me what i mean to you

and now we'll all watch as the deck becomes our gallows
and the sea runs thick with the blood from our veins
these cuts are roses she places upon me
the storm is against us now
are you better off without me now so far away?

i love you darling, so i will help you stay afloat
but this tidal wave, it has our names
like the headstone above our graves

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    Gosh I love that opening, the play on a well known phrase is really excellent.

    You had me all the way through but lost me with those final three lines, it ends up making the piece slightly cliche -

    otherwise really nice.


  • Miss Faith
    September 24, 2008
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    "and if we ever die before we wake,
    it will be long before we fall asleep
    but i left the stars still sparkling for me
    we found the wind, but we got in too deep
    we're no match for the sea"


    sad, but I still really like it. good luck in that contest dear.


    • kidwithgun silver member
      September 24, 2008
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      these are the lyrics to an old EPD song called "embers and ashes" i don't know if u remember it, it had a huge breakdown (one of the only songs for a while we played that had a breakdown) and at the very end me, david and JC all screamed different lines at the same time so it was like a big screaming match for 2 measures lol.. it was fun me and david always talk abt how much we miss that song


      • Miss Faith
        September 24, 2008
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        ah ha!

        I KNEW that I KNEW it. haha. yes I remember it now.

        sorry I didn't mention that I recognized it earlier, but I totally recall it now.


  • Symphony
    September 24, 2008

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    Ohwow, this sent shivers racing down my spine as i read more and more of it - and sad to say almost reduced me to tears ; that was such a bittersweet, poignant ending; truly amazing! you certainly went above and beyond the wave!

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