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Raindrops

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Upon her face a trail is left
her eyes so full of pain
wonder if she had slept
before boarding the a.m train.

Hands are held neatly in place
her doll and bag at side
An unmistakable worrisome face
shows the fear inside

As we watched her along the way
my partner couldn't help but ask
"Little girl are you okay?"
"Yes" she laughed with a blast.

Well why the crocodile tears
that are streaming down your cheek?
Quickly her smile disappears
and her face begins to heat.


These aren't tears that you see
but a gift from the skies above
I'm boarding a train leaving my city
to visit a state that I love

Grammy is waiting for me tonight
and I will be safely tucked away.
The weather here's full of raging fight,
had made my mom send me this way

As the raindrops sprinkled her face
they where mixed with painful tears
For my mom has to stay at my brothers place
where he has been battling his fears.

He is real sick and can not be moved out
so mommy sent me to gram's to be with him
I know my mommy loves me no doubt
and once the rain passes, I'll be back again.

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  • Swan song gold member
    September 27, 2008

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    There are not many peots who can rhyme and use meter and tell such a touching story. This was really something


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 27, 2008

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    I can only think AP's next by passionspromise is selling me a dummy or two. This is very deep and well formed.
    Thoughtful and meaningful.
    Rain is a powerful metaphor for a large part of life.

  • CandaceVaughn
    September 26, 2008

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    Wonderful...and sad..and hopeful..God stop putting me on a roller coaster. You know I love you

    Candy


  • poet2angels gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Beautiful rhyme and emotion...
    Sad with rays of hope shining through...
    I like the way you used raindrops as a metaphor for tears...
    Well done! TY for entering

    Lynda


  • Griswold silver member
    September 25, 2008

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    I dont know what to think about this one baby, it's sad, but it's not, it's hopeful, but it's not. Good job playing the emotions in this one. Love you baby...Scott

  • poet2angels gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    this contest will be judged in 4 hrs (at 10:00 CST) Thank you

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