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The Uncontrollable Force I Fear.

I wake,

startled,

sweating,

scared.

 

Breathing heavy,

watching the shadows

that are visible from

my bed.

 

Shaking slightly,

from the images

that the night

has thrown at me.

 

My one fear,

is the thing

that I can not control.

 

My nightmares.

 

Dark, wicked, horrible,

showing me things,

that I never want to see.

 

One night,

late in bed.

My family is murdered!

 

Next night,

dark and late,

my friends are gone!

 

The nightmares wont stop,

I can not tell them to go away,

every time I close my eyes,

an uncontrollable force takes over.

 

My biggest fear,

is the one thing

that I can not control.

 

My nightmares.

 

 

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My biggest fear is of my nightmares.

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  • Dangerousparable silver member
    October 12, 2008
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    exxcelent work simple and to the point no wonder you won gold


  • ScarsFade
    September 26, 2008

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    Your nightmares can be so very powerful over yourself. I really enjoyed the use of short words to make this so impacting and pretty nerve racking. I loved this poem and the story it told. the structure helped out with the rhythm and that made it that's much more cohesive....keep writing....good luck in the contest....scars.


  • musik-freek
    September 26, 2008
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    scary!!


  • catalyst.
    September 25, 2008

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    Nightmares are horrible. So real. I loved the way you described it in this poem the first stanxa really drew me in

  • misterfish
    September 24, 2008

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    You fear fear itself...very wise. It really fits the competition. It doesn't seek to frighten everyone, just to give an insight into your fear. Its a really nice poem.

    Well done


  • Hannie
    September 23, 2008

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    ...once again dani you have written an awesome poem...u had me scared for a second lol...well done...keep writing!!!!

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