upon an ocean
cement footed in
yew
porous hands
of without sound
earth listened
without soil
Author notes
inspired beyond a wave thanks Mel
A contest entry
- beyond a wave by Melissa Gayle.
2000 points, ended September 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow...this makes one think deeply about your message of Mother Earth as some interpret her...Deep imagery!
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I love the earth listening, really ingenius.
Thanks for entering hon, I hope life is treating you well. -
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Thanks, it is and for you the same I hope.
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intriquing write. damn the depth. I must ask.. "cement footed in yew".. whats the signifigance of "yew"?
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that it can be a part of nature
or read as "you pour us" hands
as sound can be a bay or a noise
and as soil can be taken two ways
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Absolute Perfection
Always my goal. Always just out of reach.
This is a wonderful, awesome write.
Bravo!
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This is like...
stellar
Earth listened without soil
Wow...what an amazing line!
I am in love with this poem. Wonderful job!
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Isn't your stuff always kind of deep?
I thought the 'of' in "of without sound" sounded weird...
but...I need to clean my ears?
The rest...freaking awesome.
I think my favorite ditty is those last 2 lines, but I liked it all.
Jessica
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think pour us?
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This is deep even for you
C
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It is... took me a while to get it myself... lol
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