The shadows dance on the walls,
Replaying the past year of our lives.
I swear I heard your voice,
Calling my name,
I’m hearing ghosts tonight.
I’m closing my eyes,
Just to feel closer to you.
Your smile, your laugh,
It all seems so real.
And now the memories haunt me.
I still see you in my sleep,
Whispering in my ear,
Tormenting me.
Why did you leave me here alone?
I miss you so bad.
With everyday it becomes harder,
To live without you.
In a perfect world,
You’d be alive,
Standing by my side.
Your smile, you laugh,
It all seems so real in my dreams.
But now I open my eyes,
Just to see that nothing’s changed,
You’re still lying in your grave.
Please tell me what you think
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The moment I saw the title I yelled "I KILLED THE PROM QUEEN! EEEEK YAY!"
seriously! Hahaha, it's pretty good, though I reeeeaaaallly want you to write some more prose poetry.... I LOVE prose!
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wow..
this is... very sad ending...
damn. But nicely written:]
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Your smile, you laugh,
It all seems so real in my dreams.
But now I open my eyes,
Just to see that nothing’s changed,
You’re still lying in your grave.
The ending shocked me
I dread what you are feeling
I asume you are writing from life
It is almost too much to think upon
I felt your words but not untill the end
Rick
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it must hurt so bad
i've felt that pain once its bitter and hallow. im sorry
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Awh , i really liked this .
im just wondering if you got the title from i killed the prom queen?
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lol yea I did,
I didn't know what else to call it lol -
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ahah .
it's a good song .
xD
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this is a very good write
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so sad
When our loved ones are called to be with God it is always hard on the one's that are left! Sorry you have to feel this pain! The Shaker
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Awwwwwwwww!
Sweet&Sad.
"I’m hearing ghosts tonight."
That's my fave line.
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wow. this really kept me reading. nice write!
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It reminds some of my poems.Haunting,beautiful ,deep .Keep it up !
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Why are you so amazing? I mean your so intense one amazing peom after another you should make a manuscript thats what you should do. I sooo love this poem its amazing amazing
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"The shadows dance on the walls,
Replaying the past year of our lives."
I love this part. Solemnity at it's best.
I really like this poem, but I think you could get a little more out of it. All the way through I thought it was a lovely poem about the sadness of a breakup. Not until the last line did I understand that this was death that separated you. With some stronger words here and there and some foreshadowing, I believe this could be more powerful and exude the true emotion this caused you to feel.
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wow that was some great insight! thank you very much, I will defiantly consider and try add more to this poem to improve it in the ways that you suggested. =] Thnx again.
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