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Scattered Soldiers

Once the trumpet sound,
her branches laid barren,
with scattered soldiers
in the wind marching for
victory. The rain came in
laid her amber, rust wet

armor before the tree.

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Quickies-30 words

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  • Rmh4933
    November 8, 2008
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    well done

    so vivid and stark the portrait you paint here, fine job


  • leander Moderators member
    November 1, 2008

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    Well this is quite short what you have written here, but you provided the reader with some great images here...

    thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander


  • Rizzie
    September 24, 2008
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    very vivid imagery good write

    • saddie23
      September 24, 2008
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      Thank u

      Thank u for the wonderful comment given to my poem. Saddie23


  • everyone1 gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    Lushious!

    Well written! I just loved this one! What a well verced poem. Short, and sweet!

    God bless you in this compitition.

    ~ James ~

    • saddie23
      September 24, 2008
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      thank u

      Thank you for the wonderful comments given to my poem. I'm glad you liked. Saddie23

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