Breaking out from backyard fences,
slapping elbow to the grain;
Six blocks to Nelson's for a habit
of alcohol or other strains.
Soles pound pavement in four-fourths time,
counting the slides as she clicks across
my mind's projector; a clouded paste
of fading light and Spanish moss.
By riverbeds we sunk in with cypress,
while cigarettes foamed with the mist.
So now as ankles cut the curbs illegaly,
I push her back and long for the thirst.
A contest entry
- Give Me What You Got by peregrin.
600 points, ended October 5, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WOW - this is excellent!! Great wording, images, depth - and emotion. So many feelings in this - especially why some drink - to forget.....
Excellent!!
best wishes in your contest.
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This is creative, paints a vivid picture, which is fantastic.
Great work!
Thank you for your entry! -
i wish i was part of that!!! and is that pic of your son? he is a cutie!!! congrats on the baby and good luck in the contest!!! nice to see you around!
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