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with more vitality------------

When a sea of compassion
started streaking into
my hitherto,desert soul
my happiness in heart and mind
knew no bounds
now  waves  of delight
weave in ,with more vitality

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  • crimsondew
    September 24, 2008
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    Bringing a smile towards the end of your read....Good write!

    All the best!


  • apropos
    September 24, 2008
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    well written. i think you might not have meant the s on weaves in the last line?


  • everyone1 gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    Love it!

    I believe you should do very well in this competition. God bless an keep you at peace.

    ~ James ~


  • Rizzie
    September 23, 2008
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    this has alot of differnet imagery in it, its nice. best of luck!