As soon as I saw him I knew it.
This boy,
This small boy
with the tears running down his cheeks
was the victim.
He was the one with the most pain.
Out of all the rest, this boy
was the one who was hurt the most.
Physically we did no harm,
But mentally, he will never be the same.
He lost his loved ones,
watched murder towards inocent people
and was left all alone.
This small boy,
alone in a vicious world,
with no where to go,
no one to go to.
We might have killed the others,
but the survivors are the ones we hurt the most.
This boy,
the boy that doesnt understand,
will suffer the greatest.
Forever it will haunt him.
He will never look at life the same.
We scarred him,
We ruined him,
but the saddest thing of all,
Is that he is only one of many,
One of thousands.
There shouldnt be anyone with so much pain,
so much suffering,
of any age.
Author notes
Please, do your part to help save the people of the world. Increase the peace, silence the violence. Thank you. ~Hollis
option 3
A contest entry
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Comments
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this is definitely gut-wrenching. i'm not sure how i feel about the flow, but it's still good.
good job!
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who scarred him? who is the we? i felt the last stanza broke out and fell flat. it didn't quite have the ring to close out a poem on such a topic. perhaps what it says in your authors notes "increase the peace, silence the violence" would have sealed this better. its also a tad straight forward which personally drew away from what you were after here
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Wow, this is a very sad and heartbreaking poem. I feel your passion of this subject. Good job!
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Wow . . . this is a sad piece, and vividly written. I have to remove it from my contest, though, because it has already been entered in another. Feel welcome to enter another in mine, though.
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This poem doesn't quite feel apocalyptic to me, I can't the sadness of this boy to the end of the world
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