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Charting Dark Water

Shimmering eddies I'm rippling along.
Frothing foam currents ever so strong.
Collecting persuasions felt on my way,
Felt here among tidal velocity's sway.

Optimal drops or high rises in waves.
Eventful sequence of brand new days.
Minuscule moisture of a rivers fill.
Seeking reason to infinity's spill.

Crashing against boulders strong,
Rising above mysterious throngs.
Perpetual motion ebbing through,
dark murky waters of phantom hue.

Sojourning vapors swept in faith,
in natures intent of all's fair play.
Yet curves in blind bends of a river,
seldom shows what fates deliver.

A lifetimes swift waters run deep,
problematic at times,yet always unique.
My surface exterior flows calmly along,
hidden an undertow in emotional fog.

Till spirit bonds one with the sea,
I,effervescence of what life makes of me.


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contest prompt;"I am a flowing wave in the river of life..Unknown"

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  • lianonsidhe silver member
    September 30, 2008

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    I loved the feel of this. The rhythm and flow of the words echoes that of water. We are indeed upon life's billows tossed. A great write.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    Till spirit bonds one with the sea,
    I,effervescence of what life makes of me.

    I really love that ending. Such a beautiful poem. Penned like flowing silk. Enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing it. Good luck in the contest!


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    September 30, 2008
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    This is awesome!! Wow you give such amazing details and descriptions in this piece!!! I absolutely love it!!! Excellent word choice!!! You have a lovely flow!!! This is perfect from start to end!!! You did a most terrific job!!! This is a write you should be most proud of!!! I LOVE IT!!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    Yes..the life and its conenction with this nature is very beautifully revealed here by the wonderful poetry by you...well done....