You shadow your flaws
with a hand-made crystal ball
exploring my indecisiveness
& captivating my reasoning;
darling
from an astronomical pitcher
you might as well pour
your lingering emotions
from a bewildering altitude
into my broken hands
because behind those eyes
nothing but tears will be liquidated.
♥
Author notes
Photo Credit:
Behind Those Eyes by ~di3loud
A contest entry
- prompt-inspired quickie :]♥ by etoile.
400 points, ended September 29, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLD SHORTS 1 by Swan song.
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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Stunning!
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This part was stunning:
from an astronomical pitcher
you might as well pour
your lingering emotions
Absolutly beautiful, loved every word of this.
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this was amazing! i loved every word.
the imagery was great. and the way you wrote this was fantastic.
i loved it. and your take on the prompt was great, i like how you tied it all in at the very end
thanks for entering
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~into my broken hands~
Ohkay, wowww, I don't know why, but I am in lalaLOVE with those four words. I love the idea of broken HANDS, instead of something unoriginal as a broken heart.
I love you. Simply. Officially. Truly Madly Deeply. Get over it, you're stuck with me fo lyfe!<33333
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I like your entry! I dont care for mine that much, though. your words are well-chosen. I like it, really... :]
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Thank youuu
I appreciate thee comment. It means a lot ♥ Good luck !
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