Waters... by AngelicMistress at All poetry

Waters rolling incessantly

through mountainsides

like morning dew

Storm winds taking over

life's days

non realizing moments

of dread

as night-fall crept

upon the horizon

One day at a time

life continued course

sunrise once again

came about

Yet, waters still rolled

through the mountsides

Author notes

For the poetic challenge round 2

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LadyDementia
October 2, 2008

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Hey! I am so sorry for not getting to this in time to score you What with one thing and another it got a little lost on me I agree this is a very beautiful and mellow piece, I would have like to have read more for sure The imagery is quite subtle and relaxing, wouldn't mind being there right now A very well penned piece
Again I am sorry for not getting to it in time to score this round. Congrats on getting through and I look forward to reading more from you
luckynsincere
September 30, 2008

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OOOO finally found your entry

I felt the poem from the core... it is, like Wolf said, mellow! I loved it! The wording was solid and I like that you took your own road with where you allowed the picture to take you!

You were required to have 20-30 lines.. so that was not reached.

As for the abstract... it was good... could have went more "out of the box", but overall was splendid to read. I feel that the reader will get and hold a very different meaning from this poem than you did from writing it! BRAVO on that!

I will also be deducting for the late entry

Just remember next time, that the link is to be left on the challenge page Hunny it was a mess trying to find it!

Glad you got it in and I wish you the best in the judging!!

Mel
Ktulu Blackwolfe
September 27, 2008
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This is acyually a very beautiful poem. One that I found rather enjoyable and mellow.

Although, you did not completely fulfill your challenge task for this round and it was turned in late as well so you will be docked points for both. The only thing I see here that is missing is punctuation.

My score
84

**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
- AngelicMistress
  September 28, 2008
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  Thanks for the comments on my piece, and I do really thank you for giving me 84 points, I am sooooo, non deserving..... Thank you sir..... Tanya
Disturbed Prodigy
September 25, 2008

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you know water is one of the most complex elements i have seen, makes strong sense with this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the challenge
Arkbear
September 24, 2008
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I get it now......mountainsides are your nose and facial structure ~
Arkbear
September 24, 2008

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Hello Mami

I am a tad confused......are you sure you are reading the Rules correctly?

I have a feeling you are a bit lost and not knowing where thre Challenge page actually is

I love this write......not as abstract as I am looking for......and your Line Limit is not reached......and you did not choose a Line or Pic to begin your write

Nonetheless, I am critiquing what I have in fron of me

I enjoy the surrealness of the waters journey.....sort of like life on a trickling ride throughout our own life ~

If you are having problems finding the Challenge Pages mami....please do NOT hesistate to let me know asap.....lovely write.....just a tad short on some of your Rules for your individual task this week ~

Good luck and God bless you!

Bear ~

Your score shall be sent to your Host

Here are your Rules..>>>>

AngelicMistress:

You must write a Freeverse ABSTRACT poem. (Keep your real meaning hidden)

No Rhyme or meter.

Select a picture to inspire your poem. (Please include pic if possible, or leave a link in you authors notes.

METAPHORS are A MUST!

20-30 Lines.

Helpful Hint for you: Select a pic and object that has nothing to do with your poems meaning... make that object your starting point, and base the metaphoric phrases on that!
Silent Cougar
September 23, 2008
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And the fluid of life still flows, finding it's own course to bring freshness to even the darker days. Leaving sediments to show it's path for years to come.

In Canyons, valleys and gorges it seeped, where trickles grew to rivers deep.

What a great thought provoking piece. Thank you.