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no worries, this is a dead end.

false practise,
of humble words
and bitten lips.

you closed your hands
and sewed your lips
and the world seemed a lot brighter.

the prospect of your soft tongue,
a babies breathe
and empty visage.

this is far more blinding,
than any eye opener.

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this is a sequel
first - http://allpoetry.com/poem/3993451


23rd September 2008.

i don't know why this doesn't hurt anymore

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  • bird-mad girl
    September 23, 2008

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    "i don't know why this doesn't hurt anymore"

    I think you're strong and you moved on, let go. I think letting go is the most courageous thing a person can do.

    I loved the lanuage in this piece. Like the other one I read today, it gets softer the further it goes. It reminds of that feeling you have in your chest after you have a good long cry, it's not joyous but releasing and hushed.

    This was a stunning sequel.

    ♥


    • petrichor
      September 24, 2008
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      you're such a wonderful commenter, once i get into a good funk i'm going to give you loads of goood comments

      i keep thinking in a way it's wrong to move on, but then she just doesn't care. i've done so much for her, even she's acknowledge that, but she just doesn't seem to want to try any longer and i just feel that she's selfish but in the end i still feel bad. I'm staying away from her, but she talks to me on msn and stuff, and it's all so pathetic because she can clearly sense that something is wrong but she doesn't even care enough to ask. it's just so horrible. but anyway thank you ! you're so lovely.

      <3