Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

not got a title yet

Am I meant to believe in nothing?

Or should I believe in an entity?

The only place I find comfort

Is in the only place i can never see

My dreams are where I am

My nightmares where I shouldn't be

 

We all carry these burdens

And we're all to blinded to see

How can we chose whats right and wrong?

When Christ's blood is the ultimate fee

 

So when I look to the stars
I see nothing but debris
When I stare at my surroundings
I see nothing but you and me
So how could I believe in God?
And how could I believe in me?

 

 

any title ideas would be nice =]

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 29 of 29
  • Tonya Lynn Turner
    July 30
    Edit | Reply
    Great words,well written. Love it.
    Destiny Fate


  • HeartbrokenVampire
    June 6

    Edit | Reply
    God is there. just be patient and believe in him. he knows what he is doing..

    apart from that..WOWZERS!! i love it!!!
    well done hunni!


  • JustTellMeWhy
    January 5
    Edit | Reply

    I have a title suggestion

    Why don't you name it "Believe?" It would suit the poem.


  • Snap.Crackle.Pop
    December 6, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    i thought this was amazing, you are such a great writer!


    I see nothing but you and me
    So how could I believe in God?
    And how could I believe in me?


    my fav lines.... if i had to pick.


  • LeslieLollipopz
    November 22, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    "what do i believe in?"
    haha anyone could make that up...but it fits ur poem.


  • Walls-within
    October 29, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    This is amazing. I think that the way you wrote this...amazing!


  • Happily Imperfect
    October 19, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    brilliant. all i can say. bloody brilliant.


  • ubrokemyheart
    October 17, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    nice one keep writing for more


  • patchgirl
    October 15, 2008
    Edit | Reply

    10 out of 10

    Awesome
    I think this is cool!


  • SaviDropKick.Oi.
    October 13, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Hi bro!
    This poem was amazing! fantastic! and just so..enthralling!
    there we go thats the right word!
    My favorite was the last stanza!
    just brilliant!!
    Maybe the title could be "Under Starless Skies"? Maybe something like that!
    I dont know, it's your poem!
    Oh I wrote some new poems if your interested!
    but great job,
    keep it up for sure!
    Loves,
    Sister


  • lil miss annoymous
    October 12, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    very good poem


  • Til the Day I Die
    October 8, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    wow

    i love this and maybe tittle it as believe...lol but no really you are gifted with words bro you alway amaze me...great write


  • lonleyteardrops
    October 7, 2008
    Edit | Reply

    Gods burden


  • Yorkshire Rose
    October 6, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    wow, a really moving poem


  • Hinata
    September 28, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    i kno one!
    how about "lost in starless nights"
    is that good?
    u have awesome poems.
    *throws more for another great poem*


  • Beautiful Sin-
    September 26, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    I like this alot. Very nice, keep it up!


  • RazrbladeRomance
    September 25, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I liked it a lot...as far as title ideas go i'll get back to you on it, I loved the last 4 lines, you amaze me


  • Rayne Goddess
    September 25, 2008
    Edit | Reply

    LOVE IT!

    Title should be....ummmmmm Bitter Nothingness lolzx idk....dis poem kicks ass tho !!


  • Wall Door Salad
    September 25, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    "How can we chose whats right and wrong?

    When Christ's blood is the ultimate fee"

    "So how could I believe in God?
    And how could I believe in me?"

    iLOVE those lines, dammit!
    god those r brilliant. my friend thinx they r gorgeous!




  • damians bby girl
    September 25, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    doude how do u get all of these ideas -lolz-


  • lemmeXdie
    September 24, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    i know how u feel.
    how can he love one who sins as much as i?
    a good friend told me that....
    my response....
    i am not deserving, no matter how much i try. i feel even more pathetic, i have weak faith. i am a sinner.
    he hugged me and said that it was okay.....for he was one too.

    ********i luv it!!!!!


  • HeartbrokenVampire
    September 24, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    aaaaw! i love this so much!!!quality poem my friend!


  • XXClownXLoveXx
    September 24, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is a good poem
    Very well written
    and its very deep



    I Lovers You David


  • Chanson belle
    September 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    title ideas

    some title ideas for you:
    floating debris
    because you're floating along in a mess of confusing debris
    or
    belief in the unknown
    or
    should I believe?

    i like this poem alot, idk why but its really good


  • simplefarmgirl
    September 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Keep looking, dude. "Ask and it will be given to you; seek and you will find; knock and the door will be opened to you." ~Matthew 7:7

    Don't know if that's helpful, but it was for me when I was in the situation you're in.


  • word20dragon
    September 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    Here are some titles

    You could give the poem the title
    1. Subconsious rapsody
    2. Beliving Just to Belive
    3. Dark Emotion Prelude
    Those are just some of the titles that poped in my mind when I was reading this poem. Lots of dark images you write some really deep dark poems I like that, Do you just like to write about the dark things in life or don't you like to write about some of the happy and fun times you have.


  • A Summer Depression
    September 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    wow black, very deep!! i can totally relate to this. its like at skwl i'm kinda a loner. but yea anyways awesome write....*thumbs up* lol


  • XxVampyressxX
    September 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    i liked it, found it intriguing. i can relate every now and than with that great write davey as usual


  • HaileeDear
    September 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    this reminds me of..being alone in the world. feeling like im the only one who understands what im going through. thats what i think of. maybe that would help you with a title?

1 - 29 of 29